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The Electric Eye

Blue has leaked into my soul renting space
My stomach has turned moiling in vexing
Dark haste, so tuned I, to television.
Churning with an electric eyeful
Flipping by remote placidly flipping;
And nothing is on.

Let me know How this makes you feel, what do you think?

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  • Jalalbad gold member
    December 24, 2008
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    Oh yes! It's modern art.
    Have a happy Holiday


  • suseann
    December 23, 2008

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     I'Surprisedm reading a modern tale of the blue flu I think. Or is it mere bordom of winter blahs? Unusual sensation this creation conjures. Undecided