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Open Your Eyes!


I breath air and spitt fire
for the Truth is what I desire
My words are like acid eating at you from the Inside out
Get your mind right and figure out what this all about
I live by my own laws making them up as I go
Reality is an illusion majority of you just dont know
Our lives has been programmed through Alien Intervention
I speak so precisely to only get your attention
The Ruling Class can knock down two towers
Fuck George Bush that niggas lies are startin to smell sour
You actually think Amerikkka never sponsored Terrorism
The CIA did funding the Mujahideen fighting a fake War on Communism

CIA funded Saddam giving him chemical weapons to go to War with Iran

They expect us to be ignorant completely clueless as to what is really going-on

It don't all add up if you ask me
But remember kidds don't believe any conspiracy theory
Listen to Big Brother and bend over and take it
They only have your best interest at heart so don't try to fake it
Don't be shy and do as your told
Start to ask questions and its off with your head with your soul being sold
For spreading the truth I will most likely end up with two to my dome
Blowing my brains out all over my home
I say Kill me put two to my dome and deceased is where I will finally be at peace
I would rather die for what I believe then some punk on my knees
Long after I'm gone completely out of sight
The people will look back n say damn maybe this nigga was right
All of the information is there you just have to read

Opening Up Your Eyes as I habitualisticly plant this seed

I riducule satanic cannabils with habitual rituals

Realizing that the hate they have for me is mutual

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  • Rane
    December 25, 2008

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    Personaly i would suggest fixing what you've already written and putting an end to this one. It's fair enough that you're new to the site and this is your first contribution, but i'm fairly certain the use of racist terms are against site rules...

    As to the content of the poem itself, it could do with some grammar and proper spelling. I'm not terribly fond of the use of slang at the best of times but if you're going to use n instead of and at least use apostrophes ('n'). Also you used threw (as in to throw something) rather than through.

    It has foundations that could become a decent contravertial piece but as it stands it reads like some nonsensical lines and non-words stitched together for the sake of a rhyme.

    Sorry if i'm seeming harsh but as i said with some cleaning up it has potential.


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    December 25, 2008

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    Welcome to allpoetry!

    n >> and.
    spitt >> spit
    dont >> don't
    programed >>programmed
    niggas >> bad, offensive word choice here
    startin >>starting.
    Amerikkka >> America
    kidds >>kids
    exspect >> expect

    you should watch your sentance structure, for example your lines are allittle long and could be shortened down:

    "My words are like acid eating you from the Inside out
    Get your mind right n figure out what this all about"

    it sounds alittle forced, but you have the foundations of a good poem Welcome to allpoetry


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