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Repeat.

Bad day.
You aren't here.
When are you here?

Desperate times, and all that.

Pour. Drink.
Pour. Drink.
Cough. Splutter.
Repeat.


It helps, you know.

Repeat.

More than you ever did.

Repeat.

Where are you, anyway?

Repeat.

Don’t answer that.

Repeat.

I don’t care.

What will you do, if you find me on the floor?

Will you care?

Repeat.

Repeat.

Repeat until it all makes sense.

Author notes

prompt:
i find more comfort in food and alcohol than i could have ever found in you.

65 words precisely.

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  • januaryrain gold member
    January 4, 2009
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    wow, great take on the prompt. repeat take another drink, I can see it all.
    well done.


  • Prison Bird
    December 24, 2008

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    wow..this is really good. really really good. i could totally feel all of it, and i loved how you did the repeat thing..you defined the meaning and then you referenced it. i love that. it was so simple but SSSOOOO full of meaning. great job.