If I should die
before I wake
some grand par fuss
my soul would make
For you're the creme'
within my pie
and all the stars are found
in your eyes
But you detest
my worst of fears
as I find myself dying
my eyes full of tears
Did I mean as much
to you my dear?
don't answer that
it's my worst fear
Author notes
(Conversation of a selfish love)
She: “Which is more true to you: Not wanting to lose me so you don't lose yourself or not wanting to lose yourself so you don't lose me?"
He: “I don’t want to lose you so I don’t lose myself”
She (thinking): "You don't love me then"
A contest entry
- Quickie! 7 poets by Hikari Lady.
550 points, ended December 24, 2008, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Beautifully penned, though I don't very much like rythme but this was so well written. It brought me such shock with its last lines.
"don't answer that
it's my worst fear"
This was heart breaking and the prompt fits it perfectly. You've used small words to express so much and so much sadness was included.
Thanks for entering and best of luck.
Much love
Merry Christmas
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A very good poem of rhyme and spot on for the prompt. Best wishes in life and the contest. Thank you for your kindness. I hope mine didn't lose sight of the contest theme.
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hahaha smile...your trophy speaks for youthanks so much for your comments
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very nicely done,, I love the rhyme, short lines, and the thought was conveyed nicely,, good luck int he contest
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