How can my love for you keep me from losing you?
So close yet keeping distance between us
out of fear of losing that which cannot be controlled.
Touching without touch to feel without feeling
things always there though never there.
In a time without time and space without space
to be needed without any need to be.
Loving the light without hate
in the arms of total darkness.
Senses find themselves senseless
awakened from slumbering silence.
Embraced in peace
by the quiet that surrounds the noise.
How can my love for you keep me from losing you?
Shower your inner beauty upon this wretched soul,
and light shall bear witness to our undying love.
It is against all that is sacred to take that which isn't given;
I give to you freely, all that is of me but isn't me.
For we are not who we think we are, if what we think is not of who we are,
and who we are has nothing to do with thought, but creation
and the Creator has everything to do with who we are.
If our love is of ourselves than nothing will be gained,
but if our love is the love of our creator; nothing shall be lost.
In ourselves we find nothing of ourselves but ourselves
and of ourselves we have nothing to give
but that which was given to us from the start.
How can one love if all they've been given is hate?
How can one hate if all they've been given is love?
Author notes
Cousin to Dragonbabyx3
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie! 7 poets by Hikari Lady.
550 points, ended December 24, 2008, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
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THANK YOU FOR LEADING ME HERE
Someone once told me that we are made up of evil and good so just love what makes up you,
still don't find that possible not that we are made up of good and evil.
I believe we a souls experiencing life and our bodies are vessels, by loving the evil that we are and all that we see, we miss the point, being to overcome, see the soul.
only through love can we see the soul, through compassion for others we see ourselves it not for us to accept the evil within us but to see it in ourselves this enables us to see it in others and forgive as we are also forgiven
we do need to love ourselves but the good that is in all of us and bring it out to share with other.
How can one love when all they've been given is hate?
How can one hate when all they've been given is love?
seems so very simple and very beautiful
excellent write
God bless you my friend...
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I love the... er, what's the word? Comparisons, analogies, IDK. EXample Time without time. The last 2 lines were very powerful in my opinion. I don't believe in true love although, only love among friends. But you very well expressed your opinions. GJ,
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wow i really think this is a good poem... i liek the 1st few lines alot
"How can my love for you keep me from losing you?
So close yet keeping distance between us
out of fear of losing that which cannot be controlled.
Touching without touch to feel without feeling
things always there though never there.
In a time without time and space without space
to be needed without any need to be."
thos are my favoret lines =)
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This is a great piece! I had to read it twice to understand it. You did a very good job with this one and I appreciate your entry here. All the best to you with this one in our contest! Take care!
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A lot of emotion, well written, blessings.
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Wow! This is absolutly beautiful! A very good, thought provoking write, so much emotion within this piece, I loved it. Great work here, and I am proud to call you my Cousin!
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wow... this is realllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllly good.... so well written and very interesting to read
Thanks for entering my contest,
and best of luck!
Your judge,
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Something to stir the mind and make the reader think about the words and not just skim over them. Drawn together with a simple but very strong ending.
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Your Offering
speaks with deep thought. Your questions pull at the remainder of the mind for careful consideration. The last verse stands out the most to me, specially the first few lines of it.
I have taken much away from this that i am in one accord with. Niaish for sharing.
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Thank you for your comment. Your time and consideration is greatly appreciated. Your words hold much value.
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Values of common sense made simple for idiots. One would think your ending questions could resolve all the garbage going on in this world. Perhaps this should be made mandatory to be read in all social circles. OUTSTANDING!
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"How can my love for you keep me from losing you?" It can't. "How can one hate if all they've been given is love?" Unfortunately, we will probably never know the answer to that question.
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Thank you for your comment and time.
Yes, I believe the questions were meant to ponder within ourselves, rather than resolve the worlds situation unless of course if finding the answer would help the situation.
Peace in light and love
Noah
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This is a very good poem; I can see why it won silver, though not why it didn't win gold, even if i haven't read the other entry. I like the questions that are presented through this piece, as it leaves one pondering, which is always good. My only concern is that the piece is very dense, and was a little hard to keep witht he flow of the piece when the lines, in some parts,were so very long. But, all in all, this was a fantastic poem, and i thank you for sharing.
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Thank you for a most gracious comment and your time.
Noah
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Very thoughtful take on the issues of the life especially dealing with the love for the GREAT ALMIGHTY..very much peaceful as well..a great poem though..well done..
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Thank you for your time and wonderful comment. Greatly appreciated!
Noah
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I can see why you won silver,should have won gold.You are very philisophical in your think.Pretty deep thoughts went into every line.Liked what you had to say and how you said it.Great job.
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Thanks for your time and comment both are always greatly appreciated.
Peace in light and love
Noah
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This is well done
I really enjoyed reading this.
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Thanks for your time and comment. Greatly appreciated.
Noah
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well done
How can one love if all they've been given is hate?
How can one hate if all they've been given is love?
great close
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Thank you, your time and comments are greatly appreciated.
Peace in light and love
Noah
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an intriguing write.
the ending was perfect for this poem.
"How can one love if all they've been given is hate?
How can one hate if all they've been given is love?"
brilliant job
have a blessed new year
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Thank you
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i love it. it is very good!
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this is a lovely piece, it's really emotive and powerful, a brilliant write, well written and easily read well done. =)
Jess xXx
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Thank you for your time and comment both are greatly appreciated.
please feel free to colour the roses black
love
Noah
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i am simply lost...the beauty flowing from your golden pen... a wonderful read and congrats on the silver!
i do believe you have written a new form for your self...a true treasure
niaish for creating such beauty
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worthy of this award!
thanks for sharing.....hower your inner beauty upon this wretched soul,
and light shall bear witness to our undying love.
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I can see why you won silver even though I think that it should have won gold.This is really well written and pretty deep in thought and opinion.Great job and congrats on the silver.
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great work and i did like it
its really deep and i am looking forward to rate you more how ever its your turn to do mine;okay and i am gonna tell you it made me cry!and generally some work doesnt;i wouldnt revised it what soever;its the person who wrote it;now come have a look and return the favour;by checking out the poem called you dont know what discrimination is!and again have a great new year
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Wow
This is so good and this has a different style to what you ususally write. It has so much depth to it and make me think alot bout what you have said. Congradulations on the Silver, Michele
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the first stanza is amazing to me. in a way I am experiencing something like this in my attraction to someone. I want to care for and be gentle to him, but I'm held back by certain perameters of our association so there's just the wish to and not the action. And the second stanza seems to be the realization of both parties of thier feeling for eachother and the scary beginning (total darkness) of thier relationship. I love how this is explained as an awakening from slumber followed by the melding of two souls in the ultimate union, but one that is not merely physical but metaphysical, spiritual, and fulfilling. This is my take on this one. Nice job. Please keep up the great works!
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Amazing write, I loved the last two stanzas and how you played with the thoughts. It, though is a logical write, gave me a need to cry for all the truths it stated and how the two in the prompt convo could relate to it.
"For we are not who we think we are, if what we think is not of who we are,
and who we are has nothing to do with thought, but creation
and the Creator has everything to do with who we are." and
"If our love is of ourselves than nothing will be gained,
but if our love is the love of our creator; nothing shall be lost."
I loved your oppasitions and playing with the thoughts really made me read this poem slowly and carefully so I get it all in. It was wonderful.
Thanks for entering and best of luck.
Much love
Merry chistmas
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Wow,
Somethings to think about here for sure.. You leave the reader pondering upon so many simple truths, that we make out to be so difficult. I really like this one, and I'm glad you shared it with me. Bravo for a wonderfully inscribed piece brother!
-Timothy aka poeticweaver
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Hello my hetane, this is a beautiful piece filled with deep emotions rom the heart. I couldn't help but think it sounded a little like us. I flt this most strongly in your first verse. Good luck to you my hetane .
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Wow, this says more than it seems to say, I feel...thanks for the experience of it and good luck in the contest
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