He loves himself
More than anyone else
He thinks he is handsome
And trust me, he is
And he has such a sweet sweet kiss
I hate him so much
But I love him so
His self-happiness
Is more important than those
Who have stuck by him threw the good and the bad
Who saw that he could be a caring old lad
But, when he doesn't want to, he is horribly mean
The scariest thing you ever will see
He throws things, he yells, at loud as he can
I wish he didn't have a temper, that man
But, I need to leave, the hardest thing I'll ever do
But, one thing I need to say to him
I love you
A contest entry
- Quickie! 7 poets by Hikari Lady.
550 points, ended December 24, 2008, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Wow!! I loved how you penned this, it shows great talent and so much emotions. I loved it.
"He loves himself
More than anyone else" and
"His self-happiness
Is more important than those
Who have stuck by him threw the good and the bad"
These were perfect with the prompt. I enjoyed reading this so much, you've written with so much truth and feelings that it brought tears to my eyes.
Thank you for entering the contest and best of luck.
Much love
Merry christmas
~Noor -
They say there's a thin line between love and hate... and you're straddling that line
I felt like I was watching you pick petals off a flower... loves him, love him not... and I had to see how it ended. A nice write... all the best to you.
Ken
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nice poem,, good luck in the contest,
I wish he didn't have a temper, that man
But, I need to leave, the hardest thing I'll ever do
But, one thing I need to say to him
I love you
Love can be very enduring can't it?
this brought a tear to my eyes,, thanks for sharing -
Wow, exhilerating...good luck with it in the contest
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