T his is rather
difficult, attempting
to write a
poem in the shape of
something concrete when I really
don't have anything
in mind... I guess
you could call my design
s p i l t m i l k
it's all in how you look
at it. What do you see?
Personally, I see a
lightening b o l t
but now i see a to r n a do
stormy weather ahead,
p e r haps.
Author notes
What do you see?
Written February 10th, 2004
A contest entry
- Slightly more ambitious. by theroyaloui.
500 points, ended February 18, 2004, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I think it is a nice try at your attempt. If you could have made your words in shape of a pitcher it could have helped, but then I know that would be tough.
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I see a dog trying to hump a leg, but that's neither here nor there. Nice concept, and interesting take on complete abstractism. If there were such a thing. Keep it up, and good luck
Peace
Chris
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