She forgot how good it felt to cry for a reason,
instead of just to feel alive.
Though the salt of tears dries her eyes,
she still feels dead inside.
The strike of pain she feels deep down,
she wonders when you'll come around.
Feeling the wrench of his heart being pulled away,
She watches as light fades from day.
The slap she feels upon her cheek doesn't hurt,
And yet it makes her sob,
Tears mixing with the dirt.
The razor in her hand her only friend,
Always been there with her up till the end.
The feel of cold metal on her skin,
The marks it leaves always so thin.
Help me she yells so loud,
as she sinks into the darkness' shroud.
Now you see her lying there,
And pretend to cry when you never really cared.
And now,I'll leave you this
as she swirls into that dark abyss.
If you ever really loved her,
Then you really should have known.
That beating her down daily,
was not the way to go.
Author notes
Ehuem,this was inspired by an eleven-part story I found on deviantART.com.It actually made me sob,very hard.It's called You Can't Ever Leave Me by ~BLACKSTONESxX.The title has nothing to do with the actual poem..
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Great write and I love how the inspiration came from a story. Great imagery and great emotion. I shivered when I got to the end. It sucks to be beaten enough to cause your own self death. great job and good luck.
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I have read this one before too. As I said before I don't usually read cutting poems but again you don't focus on the cutting part but on her emotions. Very good write. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for placing this in our friends reading list.
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Such a terrible reality to live through.
Thanks a lot for sharing this and good luck
to you with it in this contest!
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Very emotional piece - thank you for sharing
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I like it. Says a lot. I don't usually like cutting poems but you really didn't focus on that... but on the fact that of her feelings and all that she went through. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering it into this Friends reading list.
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Very emotional.
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Must say that you've painted a beautiful imagery. The opening lines were beautiful.
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Thank you very much...
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Well, to be honest, when I began reading, I wasn't really into it, but then it grabbed me, so I reread it and I absolutely loved it. It was dark, and pained, and I loved it.
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Haha,that's the way I write.I grab you at the end
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I really liked it
This poem really stuck out 2 me and i really liked it a lot. I heard this one saying from a friend of mine that goes "What do u say 2 a girl w/ 2 black eyes?" "Nothing, uve already told her twice." Anyways... I cant stand hearing stories bout ppl bein beat but i loved ur poem. Great job on how u worded it. -
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Thank you for reading.
1)I hate sayings like those.
2)I don't get the saying.
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