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My Beloved

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She loved to dance

and her hair would spill like russian spiced tea
over my shoulder; a water fall of defined tea cup curls
that left the scent of butter pecans and youth

[It still lingers]

she smiled in pearls
folded in the navel of a sunflower
that matched the prints of her summer dress

Her presence always filled the room
and stole my breath 
caused my heart to do the jitterbug every time

Even as she slept
I could see the crystals that gleamed with life and beauty
in her eyes




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Author notes

Credit pic ~ He is reminiscing of his love that passed

A contest entry

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  • Terry Collett
    March 6, 2009

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    Splendid.

    Spolit for choice here. So much to love. Lines one would want to hold close. Liked:

    she smiled in pearls
    folded in the navel of a sunflower
    that matched the prints of her summer dress


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    January 16, 2009

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    " ... and her hair would spill like russian spiced tea
    over my shoulder; a water fall of defined tea cup curls
    that left the scent of butter pecans and youth ... "

    It's the tea cup curls ... damn.


  • isabellacohen
    January 6, 2009

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    gorgeous

    a gorgeous write, beautifully woven and fearless in creation, i love all your lines,

    warm wishes,
    isabella


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    January 2, 2009

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    Yes..I agree with you..the beauty which is disccused and shared makes this life not only wonderful but to sometimes essential for all of us..well done...


  • taraneh
    January 2, 2009
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    I think you use very beautiful images,and similis


  • Angels Whispers gold member
    December 27, 2008

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    Beautiful


    This is so very beautful Catie.It's like reading a romantic story.Your words were soft and alluring and painted a very loving picture in the mind of the reader.
    Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts and I wish you all the best in the contest.
    Much love and happiness to you.
    ~Angel-anne~


  • Nicada silver member
    December 25, 2008

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    Wow! This is so beautiful, and the imagery you have used here is just amazing. Very unique and original poem, and I enjoyed this very much. Thanks for bringing this picture to life. Thanks much for entering. Blessings, Patty


  • thepoetssoul
    December 24, 2008

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    Beautiful
    What an amazing display of poetic talent.
    The imagery and metaphor is top notch.
    Splendidly done indeed.
    Best of wishes to you always.

    Tony


  • chilali
    December 24, 2008

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    Wow. What a take on the picture Cahryn! I loved this. Well done. I love the imagery and the word choice. You have such amazing talent and you are going to do so well in this contest. I just know it Good luck to you, even though you do not need it, but oh well, all the best to you anyway

    Much love
    Ylova

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