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Nothing in the end

 
http://fc88.deviantart.com/fs5/i/2004/317/5/5/November_Sunset_by_scotto.jpg 
 
 Where the sun never shines,
And the trees hang they're heads,
 Three steps right and four steps left,
You will find my resting place. 
 
 I came here in believes of love,
Like a foolish young girl of the youth,
I wanted nothing but a beating heart,
To feel love by another who I loved.
 
 Holding out my hand, slipping on a ring,
I thought I would forever be happy,
Believing in the fairy tale stories,
But forever youth I got, six feet under.
 
Fresh in the memory the day he killed me,
Saying I was nothing but his pet toy,
And now he had found a new one,
Taking back the ring and my heart.
 
So here I lay in my bed of earth,
Dreaming back at the very days,
I had a heart and the horror,
When he took it from me.
 
 

Author notes

Option 1, D) http://scotto.deviantart.com/art/November-Sunset-12235086 By scotto
Option 2, Lost - word
Option 3, Nothing in the end - title

Hope it's okay I used so many options in this poem.

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  • SpydurPoet gold member
    December 24, 2008

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    Wow. Great job. 3 prompts in 1. Excellent take on all of them. I love the imagery, the dark subject. Excellent.
    Thank you for entering the contest and best of luck.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • storiesuntold gold member
    December 23, 2008

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    Well written

    You have brought the reader within the bounderies of love a broken heart and the exit to turn and look back once again good work here


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 23, 2008

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    Wow sis, and i do mean wow, you did a great job on this poem, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • roninwort
    December 23, 2008

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    A very hauntingly beautiful poem. You did a very good job and you used multiple options
    Good luck and thank you for your entry.

    Ronin