Travelling with darkness,
seeking the light,
losing all else,
with only doubts and a single path opened.
Hopes of finding something, anything.
Clouded skies hang heavy above me.
Frozen desolation stretches forever,
till the ends of the horizon.
Dismal view closes in around.
Chilling me to the bone,
chilling me to the very soul.
This world, my world.
Without a trace of life,
without the slightest scar of human civilization,
without the soothing warmth of life.
Painted on my face the power of fatigue.
"Like the sands of time, fading"
"The last one standing has nothing left, but time to think."
Memories I cant recall, even if I wanted to forget them.
That unresolved thing inside my mind, refuses to sit still.
What is this, what is it, this thing, this thing inside of me,
even if I knew what good will it do me now.
Clouded skies hang heavy above me.
Frozen desolation stretches forever,
till the ends of the horizon.
Dismal view closes in around.
Chilling me to the bone,
chilling me to the very soul.
"This may be the end."
Uncertain light, that im desperately heading to,
reflects the purpose behind my journey.
Slowly ripping apart my insignificant existence.
Slowly setting on fire the foundations of my sanity.
Slowly betraying the colors of my memories.
Slowly, slowly, letting myself fall into the empty depths.
My thoughts are useless,
no one will hear me,
no one will hear me,
no one can hear me!
The only thing I will find in this journey,
is the blazing light of death.
Author notes
LoveDeprived
Color: Blue
WordPrompt: Despair.
This may not be a write that will make you tear, but I hope you felt the emotions I tried to instill and want the reader to feel.
A contest entry
- I'm new to AP!!! This is my 1st contest!!! by roninwort.
3000 points, ended January 7, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Bare in mind that english is not my first language. And im only a mere 17yr. old so excuse me(i guess) for any faults in my writes. I am prepared for any constructive criticism.
Comments
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Wow. Incredible. I just got back from jogging (yeah, I go jogging at midnight...lol), and the imagery you used in this was...very effective. Great take on the prompt of despair. I was kind of worried about what was going to be written with that particular word, but this was better than my best hopes.
Excellent.
Thank you for entering the contest and best of luck.
Write on.
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i love the title. it was just so eye-catchy. genius i tell ya!
anyhoo, about your poem, i think it sounded so much like a song. this piece sounded like a song, probably coz of the repetitions of the stanzas. the repetitions made it stronger though, it liuke held this entire piece together
i like the words you've used in this poem. they created such lovely imagery in mind. the descritions and metaphors used were awesome
keep writing aight
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Well done here
I have found many a teenager feeling this very thing today and in their disguise to all others they hide the sorrows from the public and let it rise again in the darkness of their own cell they call their room . Excellent work here
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You do quite a good with the imagery. I can picture the cloudy skies and the frozen wasteland that fade into the horizon. A very unique write. I like the emotion you put into it.
I would try not to use so many commas and periods at the end of every line because it disrupts the flow of your writing.
Other then that tiny piece, this poem is very good. Thank you for your entry and good luck.
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