Trees are reluctant to push leaves from branches
which cling golden with fluttering clutter
softening the surrounding air.
Winter staggers across the fields
while branches glow maroon in sun kiss
and rose-tinted hills recline
against an ice-blue sky.
In one corner of the world the year slumbers
elsewhere it chokes
as humans blast the planet
to non-existence.
A contest entry
- The Natural World: In Honor of AsIThink by hawkeslake.
1050 points, ended January 3, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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The old gal is stronger than we think!
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Hi Mum. A beautiful write. Powerful. Vivid descriptives. Good imagery, flow and tone. Deep expression of emotion. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Well penned. Congratulations on winning Honorable Mention. Well deserved.
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This is a powerful theme you've captured here. Instead of leaving only footprints, mankind leaves a path of endless destruction. Beautiful imagery in the first bit of this. Well done.
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I was going along merrily enjoying the wonderful imagery, and BAM! you wound up with a punch! Thank you for entering.
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Love it
I am a person who loves imagery and this was lovely. Thank you for giving me the pleasure of reading it.
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I agree with everything AsIThink has said below. You have created amazing imagery with your words here. A pleasure to read...alby
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What Imagery...
"Winter staggers across the fields
while branches glow maroon in sun kiss
and rose-tinted hills recline
against an ice-blue sky."
These words nearly stepped off of my pc's screen. Very amazing combination of imagery and plain-o'l good writing. I saw this scene so clearly; it certainly whispered something wonderful to me. So, thank you for posting this.
AsIThink...
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