"There's something about you I just can't get over"
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With those words I find myself f
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the technicolor hole that you dug yet again.
Finding myself believing every word that drips like acid out of your grotesque mouth,
[sticks and stones, worms and maggots and all the beautiful things that you are made of my dear]
Tequila neverland sounds so good right now, cocaine highs never sounded this wonderful before.
I'm trapped in your eyes and you're not even next to me, I've never been this desperate.
'Cause lets face it, there's something about you that I just can't get over either.
II
&it's starting all over again[again over all starting it's&]
the racing heart, the nervous stomach, the dirty pictures, what am I doing?
[I.have.a.boyfriend.]
acid drips from my lips with the lies that i tell him
i'm.going.to.hell.
III
let's just get this over with already, tattoo fuck-up on my hand and slut on my forehead cause that's all i'll ever be
we both know it
c'mon baby lets dance the night away under the pale moon and blue stars
this isn't a sight that we see everyday, it's not everyday that we get to be alone together.
secret lovers need to count the seconds and breathe in deeper
racing hearts and fireworks explode.[take a fucking picture, it'll last longer]
IV
this is the beginning. the beginning of us.
please baby, don't let me screw this one up.
A contest entry
- DIRTY [P.r.e.t.t.y] WHORE by Candy Morphine.
550 points, ended January 6, 34 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - absolutly anything! by nobodys-girl.
527 points, ended December 29, 2008, 81 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - & sometimes the prettiness never dies♥ by xxRainbowDawnxx.
400 points, ended December 30, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i get exactly what it menas. great write!!!!!!!!!!!
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Beautifully wrote, so raw... I know someone who I couldn't help falling for, even though he never was good for me, just the feeling of being in someones arms for a short while, almost made my heartache & depression wortwhile. Almost.
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Nice... it wqs a pleaser ... to read some of your
work... insted of enering... one of your contests.. for a change... This is style... I like it.. Your friend in Poetry...
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wow hun this poem blew me away...just wow...if you're going through anything like this...just know that i'm always here if you need to talk...and you are a princess worth so much more than any man tells you and that you don't need a man to show you real love
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aw thank you so much hon!
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coley
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wow...this is amazing. i loved it. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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i loveee this poemm!
you did such a good job, and it relates to so many.
but if this is about you, don't be so hard on yourself.
you'll make the right choice, i know you will
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well this amazing. in everyway.
there is only one thing; without being to ignorant, what are the (i), (ii) sort of section like things about?
but besides my incompetance not understanding that fact; this poem is brilliant. the way its written speaks dirty whilst still remaining pretty.
this is everything dirty pretty will ever wish to be?
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this is an amazing write. im going through something huge right now and it parallels this in a screwed up sort of way. this is a beautiful write. nicely done.
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I LOVE THIS! the imagrery and everything...love how u worded it great job! and good luck
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sweet write great work seems as if it is full of emoson truly beautifull great work hope to read more sometime -bows-
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I really like the wording, images and emotion in this.
well done!
best wishes in your contest
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oh my gosh .
this is AMAZINGG! is this a song .. ? well poem or song i felt in a daze like your peice or art right here was sucking me in , every picture was vividly painting a picture in my head , you are one AMAZING writer my friend (:
amazing job -JoAnna
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this is the best poem ive read in the last two months. very well written and i love the layout.
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In its own right this is quite powerful, in some lines i think it can do without the bracketed sentences, but in another light it makes it work better. i usually compeltly disregard any group comment asking to read a poem because i dont take part in the groups too much, but based on this, i think i better start followin the links more.
Great work.
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wow.. this is amazing.. I like it alot.. it's a dirty pretty and let me tell you honey it is deff pretty in my eyes.. it's something we all face.. Thinking we ruined everything and letting guilt eat us from the inside out. To fear what has happened in the past and hope history doesn't repeat itself. I like this one alot. It made me think of myself a little. A side of me i don't show much.. but AWESOME job!
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aw thank you so much hon. dirty pretty is definetly my thing. if you go to urban dictionary and look up dirty pretty im one of the writers listed there :]
thank you so much for the comment
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A) YOU ARENT A SLUT OR A FUCK UP! so get over that already lol
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this is amazing!
ahhhhhh you have always had this awesome talent to take how you feel and put it straight to words, seriously, you're so good at this jules!
I'm trapped in your eyes and you're not even next to me, I've never been this desperate.
'Cause lets face it, there's something about you that I just can't get over either.
I love those lines, they are gorgeous, just like Youuuuuuu.
Ily and i cant wait til you live with muh!
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Soph
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Wow, this is a really go0d write. I can relate to it, which is another reason why I like it so much. It has great imagery and emotion, too!
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Wow..! gr8 Imaginary I like your style its wonderful...
I can also kinda relate to you poem!
"secret lovers need to count the seconds and breathe in deeper"
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Very impressed I am. I like the way that you tell your stories......capturing the emotional moment, you should try your hand at producing a Novel (at least toy with it by writing short stories and see where you can go with that) and polish your skills even more.
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wow
imagery was intense and attention grabbing.
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I love your writing bby && seriously, we must be long lost twins. I can always relate to everything you write. I feel like I'm reading my own memories. I love the way that the emotions come out of your writing. gorgeous bby.
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