I stare bare faced and wide eyed at this wall
w i l l i n g
anything to take away the lonliness.
[there's a reason these walls are blank, babe.]
and all they do is stare back with invisible eyes
that I try to unravel from underneath the
paper-thin concealer covering the hidden parts.
and [each second means nothing-]
when you're alone in a room
where no one can hear
any sound that you
create or mistake
that you make.
and the walls
[they all
speak]
or so
it
s e e m s.
In a list
A contest entry
- A contest for loners by Big Scrive.
550 points, ended December 29, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites round contest #1 by serenity silvermoon.
425 points, ended December 27, 2008, 86 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Loneliness by Cyclical.
1000 points, ended February 9, 70 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nice Work
Good imagery and diction. I also like the form that your poem creates, dwindling away to nothing.
Good write. -
Pretty cool poem. I was somewhat confused by the parentheses, they didn't really seem neccessary... Oh well, I liked the layout, it makes me happy when people do that. Thanks for sharing!
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