Sun, a startling star so bright
Twinkles in golden everyday light.
The mood so cheerful, puts everything right,
And all are happy, to my delight.
Sun, with a beautiful orange-yellow hue,
Awakes on the fresh morning dew.
It is so vivid, it's one of a few
That have mastered the art of captivating you.
Author notes
I'm in Thailand at the moment (it's very hot even though it's winter) so that got me thinking about the sun. Did you like it? What were the bad and good parts? Thanks for reading, and please comment.
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I like the rhyme to this..and the form. amazing write.
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wonderful work!!!
KEEP WIRTTING!!!
~ Chelsey
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*applause*
you conveyed to me a sense of cheeriness only achieved by the sun shining on my face. I am in canada middle of winter and i needed that. I will read this when i feel cold.
IXI
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wow..great poem!
nice job
keep it up!
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Great imagery, I love it!
This has a very good flow,
I like the rhyme in this.
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I love the discriptive and imagery in this write. I didn't even know it was rhyming untill i read it the second time!! Well done!
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this is very discriptive.
the imagery is great.
this has just put me in a good mood.
haha :]
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I liked this piece alot! I love the wonderful rhyming ^.^ Bravo!
♥ Kathraina
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Short and sweet i loved it. Its like the nursery rhyme i never had.
Erm, if i was u i would change "orange-yellow" to "orangey-yellowey" just for the flow, rhythm of it. But your choice.
Loving the simplicity but precision that so many poets have forgotten.
thanks for sharing x
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it was soft and subtle
the rhyme flowed well and didnt stutter at all
a really nice piece to read
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