When tears are cried, gravity pulls
And they fall into deep and tormented pools
Tears are made to descend
But once every last tear is cried
And the heart fills with air inside
It is prepared to ascend
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It seems like it could use more, but I was too tired to add anything. Let me know what you think.
Please tell me what you think
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Still enjoying your poems!
It's not bad. Might have been better if there was more to it, but perhaps you intended it to be short with a punch. -
New name and avatar!
or I'm just really late...
interesting poem.
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Nope, not late.
thanks for the detailed and long and drawn-out comment on my poem.
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Well, its just a very short poem that's like about the science or physics of tears. Or I'm too stupid to see the allegories.
Never mind, its basically about how you feel better after crying! Wonderful!
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No, it doesn't seem to need more...it is very beautiful and hopeful.
This concept is defining and makes alot of sense. It seems it would be a comfort to know in those times of tears...even though it's hard sometimes to be optimistic when you're sad.
Anyway, I'm glad you shared these thoughts
You always make us see things and think about things in a new and different way, and you express it beautifully with your words!
♥
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Glad you enjoyed it. You always have something encouraging to say. Even about the nonsense I spew out sometimes. Lol.
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Beautiful
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