A black horse sat,
so alone you see,
in the side of a barn,
neighing with glee.
He sat and sat,
and sat all day,
munching on grass,
day wasting away.
Although,
only I,
saw this pony you see,
for he was a shadow,
the suns trickery.
Author notes
No notes this time except again I used Black Horse.
A contest entry
- Surreal Picture Prompts by owlish.
900 points, ended January 5, 8 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
no question
Comments
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A nice poem, nicely rhymed and a bit whimsical. I like the twist at the end
Good job
Dee
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Its a simple write. I liked the twist. I gave substance tp the poetry. However the concluding stanza could have been better.
The final stanza does not have the instance of rhyme. As also it is not a quadraplet like the prev two.
since the poem is small, it does not produce a conducive effect.
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Uhh...english, please.
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This is great! I can actually find no flaws in the rhyme or flow. Nice twist in the end. Thanks for your entry, best wishes!
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