I would that all conundrums be
of Looking Glass simplicity,
one's Jabberwock most corporeal,
lest reason's death knell sound its peal.
I would confusion's bane be clear
and bright as certain Cheshire leer,
both white and red knights champion
my war for sense 'til it be won.
I founder 'neath the Hatter's hat
(reality's what I combat)
while trying hard to celebrate
the mundane, but it's far too late.
This Wonderland would be a fright
if truth had not its vicious bite.
Author notes
With many thanks to Lewis Carroll.
Oh, that we could for a moment escape . . .
RatherImaginative
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 30 of 30
-
beautiful
-
BANDITS UNITED
a late spotlight comment ...sowwy...
I am still finding Olde English styles of writing hard to read but I liked the imagery you conveyed throughout this and I love those last two lines !
Nice write indeed and I am loving that border you have
xx DD
-
Lovely. I'm going to interpret, "... be a fright" to mean something "really great", so that the final line makes sense in the context of a poem about fanciful worlds and a world of reason.
-The Manatee
-
Bandits United!
As impressive as Lewis Carroll's writing...I like how the visuals of this poem came over with such impact and clarity...I personally found Alice In Wonderland quite shocking when I was a child lol, but when I was eleven yrs old I managed to get the part of 'The Doormouse' in Alice In Wonderland's children's Opera, it was then I began to understand Lewis 's mind and his vivid imagination, I like how you have captured it in this fine piece...
My overall impression: Abstract, creative, excellent vocab, refreshing and a joy to read...
A good choice of your poetry to be spotlighted...welcome back, you have been missed
Love and smiles...
~Lilac~
-
Very nice ...
and very nicely done. I see your cheering section agrees.
Keep up the good work. -
bandits united
This is a creative poem with lots of imagery pack in so few lines. I agree with the last line if truth had not its vicious bite. I have my share of being bitten. I like how you made your own version of the Wonderland. I have been away for awhile. This is the first poem I read.
-
Bandits United!
Wow
Adore how You weaved this and the words You have brought forth
Astounding!! Love the rich Imagery and Energy~
Beautifully versed and took me there~ Bravo!
Woot~
Keep that quill & Mind dancing
Thank You for sharing Your Voice & Talent
Best wishes in all You do~
with love & light~ Desire~*~
-
Bandits United
You do so well at this very English writing, like falling off a log.
Yet when you put it all in rhyme, you work is so in line. The pleasure of this beauty was so enjoyed...mac
-
BANDITS UNITED
Great write.
-
BANDITS UNITED
This is such a cool poem, you took the beloved Lewis and turned all those antics and memorable words into a poem. An excellent exampe of your poetic skill.
-
BANDITS UNITED oh my yes!
I am understating my comment to say that your poem is impressive, dear poet. This is a beauty of a poem and you look like you came straight from Shakespeare!
-
BANDITS UNITED!
Your rhyming was very creative and had a great flow to it! I enjoyed this poem and can truly say it has some great qualities! Great write!
-
BANDITS UNITED!!
Carrie, This is very creative and complimentary to this familiar work of Carroll. You have touched on rich iconic characters of the tale and have given this story new life. Well done my friend and welcome back! 
Write On!
You have been Spotlighted by your Poetic Bandit
family because WE CARE!
Brother dennis
-
Bandits United!
This poem works on several different levels. On one level the poem looks at truth, the differences between reality and fantasy and on another it celebrates the imaginary characters that are so delightful in his stories. I liked the way you combined the two creating a poem that makes you stop and think.
-
BANDITS UNITED
Spot on rhyming couched in lovely "oldy worldy" imagery,complete
with some clever narrative challenging metaphor.Welcome back to A.P. ...George.......
-
BANDITS UNITED!
Wow! This is an awesome poem with very good word usage and metaphors. Lots of imagery. I love the way you need to ponder on the meaning. That always makes it special. Even the title would draw a person in. Great job and keep penning. Congrats on being picked by the Bandits for recognition. Have a good evening and night.
Sam I Am
-
Bandits United
Hey... Wonderful write there. The tittle is very catchy. I enjoyed the rhythm, the rhyme and the entire flow of this write. Enjoy your spotlight.
-
Bandits United
I'm pleased to see that you have come back to AP since I've always loved your poetry. You write magical rhymes and your form is always perfect. This Carroll inspired sonnet uses the imaginative language for which you are named and I enjoyed it very much. Peace, Liz
-
Bandits United!
Wow....like the Master Carroll himself! Fantastic content, timing, rhythm & rhyme.
Wonderful allusions & imagery. Felt as thought I stepped through the looking glass.
Great bed time read for me...now it's off to 
-
BANDITS UNItED
This is your day in the spotlight: enjoy.
Quite the title - and the sidebar fits with it perfectly. Lewis Carol's Alice in Wonderland certainly influenced these lines - liked the flow and the rhythm, rhyme and images the words conjure up as one reads the poem. Very old fashioned language one does not hear often these days.
-
Bandits United!
A great write! it is rather imaginative as a matter of fact. Good word choice, and flawless rhyme and rhythum, an enjoyable read...
Love & light
Debbera
-
Bandits United
Yuour poems never fail to please.
Alice through the looking glass The mad hatter The Cheshire leer.
You pulled it all together like a song.Rhyme perfect.
-
Bandits United!
Wow. Gosh this is bloody amazing;
I'm intrigued deeply by the words, the imagery and the background just makes this explode even more into my mind - I love the Looking Glass reference
bravo!
-
Very nice. Great job
-
An extremely interesting and thought provoking poem. Your rhyming was I feel totally superbe.
-
Very nice ...
and we do seem to often like the same things or various versions of them. Here:
(reality's what I combat) - I'd put "must" in front of "combat"
since it makes the line scan better, and I think stronger as well. I'd also reverse the order of the last two lines.
Otherwise, good job. Well, actually it's a good job anyway, but would be better with those minor changes.
-
Wonerful
i do believe Lewis Carol would be impressed. You have done his briliance proud
-
This is a very nice poem. I love your take on Alice in Wonderland. *hugs*
-
Please read the rules and enter your name in your Authors Notes.
-
-
My apologies . . . done.
-
Adding your comment:
1 - 30 of 30
