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Gone

Soft was once your touch.
Sweet were words you spoke.
Eager I once was.
I now long to be alone.

Quickly our lives torn apart.
I hold on to memories
Daydream of life, that used to be.
I still carry your heart with me.

Quiet I have become.
It's like a thorn in my side.
I have become so numb.
You are no longer by my side.

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  • Romeo Dragonheart
    February 11

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    Beautiful words. Sad at the end. To many things could be compared to this but the one comes to my mind is sad indeed you are excellent at capturing the feelings in your lines and letting them wash over the reader


  • Ryan79
    February 11

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    Beautiful rhymes in the poem. I like the way you captured the feelings and emotions. I can fel what you are saying.


  • The Drifter
    February 2
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    Yes, you once again, well written.
    I think you are reading my mind.


  • LovesPlayToy
    January 31
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    this is such a beautifuly sad write! u are very talented writer ! keep writing!


  • KissMe123
    January 25

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    i love the sound of this poem the first time i saw it i read it over and over again its very sorrowful but i think that many people can relate


  • insatiable
    January 24

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    Great

    I totally get where your coming from with this one I recenly went though the same process. It was hard but worth it and you always come out stronger and wiser, more prepared for the journies ahead.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    January 24
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    Not bad, kind of sad.


  • Moonlight95
    January 24

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    I love this poem! It's very powerful, I wish I could think like this, u make me jelous


  • addicted-flaw
    January 24

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    i love this poem my favorite part is: It's like a thorn in my side.
    I have become so numb.
    You are no longer by my side
    i love it!


  • redbarchettadrive gold member
    January 23

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    I loved the rhyming in this piece!
    Strange how sorrowful times bring out the most awesome poetry out of us!


  • Horcrux.Breathing
    January 17

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    This is lovely

    I love it. you have made it rhyme without making it sound forced. This poem speaks ckearly to me I can relate to it alot. well written

  • Eusebius
    January 12
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    A very deftly done poem, full of saddness, a most poignant write, indeed! bravo!


  • mrocun
    January 12

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    A painful poem.
    The structure of the poem perhaps takes away from the emotion in it, but well done nonetheless.

  • Anyajoellienne
    December 22, 2008

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    I like the style of this very much
    the pain and the wording has good feel
    a strong emotional piece

  • Eusebius
    December 22, 2008

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    Whistful and so very lovely, bittersweet and poignant and also soooo romatical! I loved it! bravo!

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