and that mighty redwood stood tall
until you broke my heart
then it pierced your soul
now it lies in fragments
of my imagination
dull shrapnel
in the company of tattered fallen
those whom i still respect
A contest entry
- 5 poet QUICKIE by letters to no one.
400 points, ended December 22, 2008, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE GOLDS Freeverse by Swan song.
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Comments
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Intense and awesome from the word go
This was a joy to read tjhank you for your entry
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I like the abstract take on the prompt
But I'm pretty sure you left out a word in the lines;
"in the company of tattered fallen
those whom i still respect"
I think it should be,
'in the company of the tattered, fallen
those whom i still respect'
Either way,
great write.
Thanks for entering.
Shelly
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