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Rejection's Lost it's Bite

We were always underfoot
in your quest
for a flawless world
worthless
useless
little crumpled scribbles
tossed aside for imperfections
Now just a game
Can you make a 3-pointer
into the trashcan?
Guess not.
Oh well, the cleaning lady'll
get us later

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  • brandy.
    December 23, 2008

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    useless
    little crumpled scribbles
    tossed aside for imperfections


    i really like those lines


  • Cimbolic
    December 22, 2008

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    It's short and simple, but it really hit me, as it brought me memoroy of unfinished creations that I would put aside and toss later, thinking that they weren't up to my new standards. Writings and drawings alike, I forget how many pieces I should've finished or kept for reflection. Taking our own work for granted is an influence of oblivious self destruction. This really made me think.


  • AllLoveIsGone
    December 22, 2008
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    nice nice very nice


    • ladyhelenaofsorrows
      December 22, 2008
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      thanks, i appreciate it!
      lol, your comments sound a lot like my sisters for some reason......... idk. she does the repeating word thing too, tho hers tend to make no sense..