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A Slice of Day

A rolling curl of creaming surf
Laps gently on the sandy shore
A Seagull screams abuse from high
Atop a pinnicle of air
A skittering flock of Dunlin whirr
Low and fast, a touch of smoke
A pair of Terns , dance,  dive and soar
To catch a meal that's unaware
A Cormorant hangs it's wings to dry
A crucifix for sun and air
A Seal rolls over on a rock
Finding warmth, returns to doze
A gentle puff of breeze that stirs
A little sand between my toes
A patch of shingle, murmurs low
While Pebbles play a washboard tune
That's a slice of day I watch
Sitting on this hot sand dune.

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  • Bad Bill
    December 27, 2008

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    You really bring your "slice of day" alive with some wonderfully descriptive phrases and lines. I particularly like "A crucifix of sun and air" and "While pebbles play a washboard tune."
    Best of luck in the contest,
    Bill


  • hawkeslake gold member
    December 22, 2008

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    Very colorful descriptive picture of a day at the beach, which is welcome given our temp here is about 1 degree F ! Thank you for entering.