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notebook pages (thoughts unseen)

 

Sounds of loud mistakes,

the beating of hearts and

how many pills she takes.

 

Hold onto everything sacred and secure.

Not everyone can smile like you do.

 

Unleash the honesty that

her mind holds hostage.

Thanks for nothing,

if only you knew how bad I needed you here.

 

 

None of this will be as bad

as what happens when I wake...

 

 

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  • Swan song gold member
    January 13
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    oh my this was another one that was very very good. beautifully written and again the mystery


  • Manish
    December 22, 2008

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    I like the idea of the sounds of loud mistakes, and the beating of hearts - we say the heart beats but this sounded like some kind of music to me. And the 'thanks for nothing' bit is quite extraordinary.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    December 21, 2008

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    wow another powerful poem that you've written. sometimes the thoughts and words that others don't see or perhaps are blind too are often the most intense but painful ones.. I remember long ago when I used to write my thoughts down in a journal/diary type of book. my most inner most thoughts/secrets were kept there. ones that I didn't trust with anyone. dark days were many then, now it seems but a distant memory one that is fading. I can relate to the first stanza a lot..
    very thought provoking and extremely deep.

    Excellent poem
    kat