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Release the Heart

 

Fires of mistakes

smolder in such a lonesome fashion.

 

  I admire the festivites from afar.

 

 

The beauty of redemption

 here to behold:

 

Smoke rises in perfect rings,

  letting a sunbeam

   shoot to the heart.

 

   As the flames consume, (our God is a consuming fire, after all)

the heart looks up.

 

Blinded, he smiles,

 

"Who needs to see?"

 

 

 

Rising from the burnt flesh that contained him,

the heart looks with perfect sight-

 

This world is a series of mistakes;

  this love he feels

is a ocean, crushing him against a cross

with it's mighty love,

        tried and true, never failing.

 

  Everyday,

    forevermore,

     the heart is crushed by love.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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smoke rings, per contest rules

(I'm surprised how this turned out!)

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  • Dalaney gold member
    January 5

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    What a beautiful take on the prompt! Your final lines are simply breathtaking...thank you so much for entering this contest! Love, Lane