Life without that person in your life,
It seems to suck and crash,
Cause everything you once had known,
Is now a flash of the past.
You think about that person alot,
You question and wander why,
That everything that once was good,
Had suddenly gone ary.
Everything that once went on,
It kills me to the core,
That we were once the best of friends,
And now there is no more.
I wish that I could do it again,
And change the way I'd done it,
To be a better,
More humbled guy,
Instead of denying it,
And just watching it die.
Life will go on and so will the memories,
Of all that we had shared,
That special hug and that tug in my chest,
The amazing kiss,
And how it was of best.
All I can do is live life to the fullest,
To do my best in life,
To learn from all this dating experience,
And to pray for an awesome wife.
A contest entry
- Devastatingly Depressing. by a.changed-soul..
1130 points, ended January 5, 23 entries
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This was marvelous,
lovely imagery..wonderful flow...
I loved your choice of words..
"Life without that person in your life,
It seems to suck and crash,
Cause everything you once had known,
Is now a flash of the past."
Great Job!
Thank-You for entering,
best of luck.
x
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Welcome to Allpoetry
This seems to be a reflection on the person that you wish that you had been when you lost something important.
It is very honest, and flows wonderfully, almost as though I heard you speaking it to me.
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Life without that person in your life,
It seems to suck and crash,
Cause everything you once had known,
Is now a flash of the past.
i think this was the best stanza in the poem. The rhyming is great and the flow wonderful. In the rest of the poem the flow seems a little broken at times. Anyway, all in all a great piece of work.
Laura.
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