I'm alone in a crowd of 96,
So no one notices.
I share my feelings,
But no one seems to care.
I write them messages clear as day,
But no one seems to see them.
I open my heart and it screams out,
But no one seems to hear.
I cry for awhile,
But no one sees the tears.
I ask deadly questions,
But no one seems to answer.
I give them all the signs,
But no one seems to read them.
I hope they notice me,
But no one seems too.
I share by writing, opening, crying, asking, giving, and hoping,
But no one seems to get it.
I quietly drop hints, and I drop them like bombs,
But no one acts smart.
I guess I just need guidance and a friend,
But no on seems to give those things.
I guess I'll always be alone,
But no one cares....
Author notes
I got an idea to write this from something I was writing. It's weird were ideas come from.
Don't worry it's not suicidal! I don't want to die. I just want pain to come out! My friend made a cool background that I wish I could use, it says, *Sometimes a broken heart is never healed*. It's so true. But I wish it could be!
~A Lost Soul in Life
A contest entry
- Broken Sadness by SunDew.
1200 points, ended February 26, 54 entries
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a lost soul in life
I still sometimes feel exactly the way your poem made me feel. Mostly, I felt that way in high school. OK, middle school, too. Now I only feel like that when around my mother.
A suggestion:
"thoughs" should be changed to "those".
Thanks for sharing & good luck!
~Bright Cheetah -
Sometimes the loneliest place is in a crowd. Hope you find a friend soon who will share and listen and comfort and understand.
Your 3rd from last line has a couple of typos,
But no-one seems to give those things.
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good approach
sometimes people do not listen even if your not suicidal
the message in this poem is sometimes people do not hear you and ignore you
that is a sadness to it make you sad also
it is a great thought written in a good style
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sad and beautiful
its good to know i'm not the only one who feels like this..
i liked the overall format of it and how u put it all together
my heart aches for you
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This is so sad. I love the I...
But... form.
This is a beautiful poem. Don't forget all the people here who care and will listen.
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You are not alone and I care! I know how life can bring us down and it is so hard to find the light at times. If you ever need to talk please message me, again you are not alone so many care including me. Love and hugs Theresa
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I think that being in a crowd can sometimes magnify the loneliness you feel. I like your poem since it is a refreshingly honest and deep look inside your heart and mind. You won't be alone when you're older as you have oceans of character, enough to drown all the boring, unfeeling people who don't at present listen to your pain. Be safe, my friend. Tony x
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it is amazing and has a great message.
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oh PS There is someone who cares! *nuge nuge wink wink!
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Thats wonderful! and sad! AND YAY! I is friend and always will be, thank you for liking my bg and I would let you use it if i could! And no matter how i dont listen(though i think i do, mostly) me is always your friend!
Seasonings
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Wow...this is a very deep poem. And I really loved reading it. It's filled with a lot of emotions and it's very sad. I'm sure a lot of people feel like that, when their dropping hints/shouting out for help, but no one seems to notice, but people do care, they just can't seem to take hints too well.
Great job, and good luck in the contest you've entered
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