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Hunger in the Cheap Seats

I hallucinate satisfaction
from nondescript circumstance.
Existence is not living,
and I struggle to find meaning
in my world of the mundane.

I need fuel for renewed dreams,
and perspective to distinguish
self-induced spiritual sabotage
from real life largely indifferent.
Sustenance for the inner me
looking out at grey todays
and black tomorrows.

I yearn for a reason to believe
that a change is going to come,
and that this calloused Ki
can participate in resurrection.
I need some soul food
to feed this famished deserter
of life on life's terms.

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prompt is "Soul Food"

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  • adsaige
    July 17
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    Yes

    Could be edited, but of course, this is just the screening process.


  • aeolia
    July 15
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    yes

    the language was alienating and sounded rather pompous, but i'll give you the benefit of the doubt.


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    June 22
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    Yes/


  • Malabu
    January 8
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    conrates... these did not work on my comment

  • Malabu
    January 8

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    i have pushed aside the plate life feeds me... and like wildbirds peck at the fallen crumbs from the table of heaven.


    still i will hunger


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    January 6

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    Provoking title, and a good, introspective interpretation of the prompt. The poem itself is too hard-edged to be seen as introspection, though. It has a confident stride, a shaken fist.


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    January 5

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    Wow, powerpacked and deep. This hit hard making me think of my own life. What I read into it struck a nerve within me. Awesome work as always. Keep penning your excellence..congrats on the HM!!


  • Dalaney gold member
    January 5

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    "I yearn for a reason to believe
    that a change is going to come,
    and that this calloused Ki
    can participate in resurrection.
    I need some soul food
    to feed this famished deserter
    of life on life's terms."

    you gave me more than i ever expected
    from this prompt, Russell. Your writing
    has always been the highlight of my day/night
    and I am so happy you made time to enter
    my contest. i know you've been busy, so
    thank you very very much.

    love, lane


  • guardianhost gold member
    December 23, 2008
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    I love the title

    It makes me smile... I hope it is ready soon.
    The end result was quite surprising, not at all what I thought when I saw just the title reserve. Dark excellent write, awakens a few of my inner demons. Struggling to find direction. Thank you for writing and posting.

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