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...Eternal HIM... [Hell Incarnated Mind]

 

 

 

 

 

He enamored with envy, doused eternity.
Women begged him to wed, repeatedly
down on one knee they offered virginity;
most were impure, tried to lie, gain entry
and thought themselves wise but stupidity
slithered on tongue, he tasted immediately.

Placed in confinement, kept inside a box.
Prettier faired better, hair like Goldilocks.
Women who whined, caged behind locks.
Liars tied down then quartered on blocks.

No one suspected or allured to the fact,
females went missing and at what impact
did it have on the town, might they react
when calcium covered soil, flies attacked
blood clots from veins spilled after last act
where victims released, run- then sacked.

Some dangle dry, hang on tree for hours.
Wait their turn, bear witness to his powers.
Drained of fight left within them, skin sours
and juices curdle several shades of flowers.

Rope cut, they fall stacked upon high bar.
Scores of ladies who once thought a star
was born within this man's wish yet bizarre
happenings, rude awakenings made scar
atop breast, he carved piece out- put in jar;
a little going away present meant to mar.

With favorite lyrics he played his serenade
in private for every female who had prayed
to be his wife, each given all expense paid
timeshare vacation with him and his blade.



Author notes

 

From Hosts:

Before I get to your first task for this challenge, let me go over what is expected of you.

First, please make every effort to get an entry in. There are alot of points and time put into this competition by both myself and the judges. It is very dis-heartening when you post a round up and half do not bother to enter.

What we do want:

-DARK (duh!)
-your best and honest effort
Each round will be different and each round will see some of you eliminated, until we reach the final round. Expect each round to get tougher and more challenging.
So with that, your first challenge will be simple.
SORTA!

What we want!~

*****30 lines no more, no less

Find some dark inspiration from the following lyrics. Write what comes to you as you read these words.

[World of Make Believe by Within Temptation]

On golden wings
She flies at night
With her dress
It's blinding white
Countless diamonds
And her long blonde hair
The queen is coming
So you better be aware
Her plums and flowers
They're never the same
Blue and silver
It's all her game
Flying dragons
And enchanted woods
She decides, she creates
It's her reality

[REF:] In her world of dreams and make believe
She reigns forever
With all her glory

Unicorns appear in her sight
The fireflies lead her trough these woods at night
In search of the legendary amulet
And it's secret
In the big oak there is a door
Which will lead her
To the wizard shore
And she'll ask him
For the wind to sail her home
To the world where she belongs

[REF:] In her world of dreams and make believe
She reigns forever
With all her glory
In this world of endless fantasy
She makes it happen
It's her reality

[REF:] In her world of dreams and make believe
She reigns forever
With all her glory
In this world of endless fantasy
She makes it happen
It's her reality

Five of you will be eliminated in this round, so let's see what you guys got.

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  • LittleMoon silver member
    January 10

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    Well done for the silver, I thought it should have received the gold but we all differ in our opinions. I found it completely held my interest from the first word to the last. The whole thing, appearance, flow of reading and content fitting the prompt are all excellent to me.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    January 5

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    Wow, I agree with the comments below, this is a superb piece of darkness. Thanks for entering and good luck


  • Immortal Obscurity Greeters member
    December 28, 2008

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    I think Ktulu pretty much said it all. Very well written, and good luck to you!

    Laura, aka Immortal Obscurity


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    December 27, 2008

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    This is a brilliant take on the prompt. I liked the direction you went and lines like,
    calcium covered soil

    WOW!.

    Well done.

    **Ktulu Blackwolfe**


  • HaleyMary
    December 22, 2008

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    Powerful write, Desire. The ending seemed metaphorical, in a way. It makes me think of how sometimes even if people may not feel hurt physically, they can still feel hurt emotionally, which can sometimes hurt more. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.

    Haley Mary

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