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addiction

tempestuous melodies crash through the gates of
  sanity. sparrows sing
                                                wings beating flight
through the kaleidoscope of the mind.
  away from the world,
    from the bells tolling, everwhere, from
        the vultures and ravens,
            from you.

there was a forest at the end of this street,
and beyond that a spring of liquid bliss mingling
with the confusion and pain. and then there was light,
always. light always from the sun, or the moon, or the stars, or
your face.

and too often it was your face. this sad craving
never ceased. maybe it was the nicotine, but maybe
it was your face. i think
                                            it was your face.

I watched the show and was part of it
haphazardly stumbling through the curtains
  of the heart, lost but
                                stumbling
through the curtains of this vast and empty heart,
  last disillusionment fading before the symphony
could stop playing its knell, last
        waking moment before the dizziness and
longing would lull us into the obscurity above.

stars fade.

chirp chirp chirp

Author notes

#16, word bank - tempestuous, kaleidoscope, craving, haphazard(ly), vast, disillusionment, obscurity

Hope you like it. It was a good word bank. =) Shya

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  • SubKitten
    May 3

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    A very interesting work. The overall tone and layout worked well together. The way some of the lines were indented had an interesting effect on the flow, because it makes the reader pause instinctively. This works rather well, and was a very nice touch.


  • hey charlie
    April 11
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    I really enjoyed reading this. I love the imagery. Thank you for entering.


  • PerfectImperfection
    February 4

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    Such a great piece of penning here! Telling a tale within a tale, the flow is very well constructed to complement the thoughts and imagery woven within. Very nice. thank you so much for your entry!


  • Py120
    December 21, 2008
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    awesome

    wow ive never seen apoem that can decribe that feeling as well as yours has. BRAVA!