Come icy earth
and brittle’s break
of bow and branch,
a pressing wrapped worry
during this desolate dear downing
I am determined to hold and then grow.
Come half-drowned soil
and roiling green meant to renew,
like a live birth after a loss,
it sings in soft and lilting colors
like baby taking first breath,
but, oh, the heart stopping faith
it takes to risk such reasons for my joy.
Come brisk bulging blossoms
and feathered unfurl of leafy laziness,
cupped cheeks of bloom and groom
in blazing cacophony of pulsating petals
beneath my canopy of sweeter jostle
to gather all the joy while I can
where foliage shadows surely sing.
Come flame that flickers brown
and autumn aches for those,
choking on dust and dryness,
have scrolled up their laughing tongues
to sweat the last drops of furious fall
before full freeze and fatal warnings
that I must basket, bin and bottle
my own needs to have a true harvest
for such gracious but grinding giveaways.
Author notes
prompt: Option #2: Use at least six words from the work bank in your poem - Used all
brown flame dead autumn renew canopy birth foliage icy brisk desolate
pressing choking lilting blazing soil
In a list
A contest entry
- Seasons, Options! Big points! by jadeangyal.
1250 points, ended January 4, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Cleverly created ...
and with imagery that entails a certain fascination for what is not shared. Well done and congratulations for the trophy and points. Don't you just love challenges ... for I see that you used all of the word bank words. j
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Ty waydownupon joy. I do love these challenges.
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I love the alliteration. It is equally as pleasing as a rhyme, when it is well written. The most beautiful and amazing lines in this poem were "but, oh, the heart stopping faith
it takes to risk such reasons for my joy" These lines made my heart swell.
The end of the poem "fatal warnings..." was a great application to life, and could have several meanings. Thank you for entering my contest. I will gladly part with my points to read a work of art such as this. -
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ty jadeangyal.....when a poem begins, it simply scrolls out of me, betimes. Thank you for such kind comments.
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This was just fabulous! What wonderful words you used and arranged them so vividly: brittle's break of bow and branch/...desolate - then: determined to hold and then grow.
roiling green meant to renew, like a live birth after a loss
I LOVE THIS SET OF LINES! This really made me sit up and pay attention as I read. Then "but, oh, the heart stopping faith/it takes to risk such reasons for my joy."
Beginning each stanza with Come was simply wonderful.
The only negative I found was that the alliteration became a bit overwhelming. I think that could have been toned down somewhat.
I really, really love this poem. Good luck in the contest celtic queen
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I have had that comment before....but I do work on sound of a oem as well... and with this poem the (k) of cacaphony and (
of quick retort is softened by many (s) shush sounds. Ty for you comment. I will be more alert to the reader's dilemma.
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Very good.
I love poems of nature. Very well written. Write on!
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Ty Evemauy. I appreciate you stopping by.
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