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Shallow

 
Oh God where have I gone.
I have become faceless, where once I could look
into this mirror and see myself as beautiful.
I cannot feel what is real any more
my heart has made me hold my head downward
people walk by and it is though I no longer
exist with in their presence.
I have become unrecognizable
to those who once loved me.
This face has become hard and shallow
I have lived without you Lord and now I am
living without myself.
Forgive me my Precious Lord, help me to get
my face back for I have learned
without you one shall become faceless.

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  • raggyann
    January 18
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    this poem told the whole truth

    great work on the messagein this beauty


  • lindaburns gold member
    January 3
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    I see a couple of places where there are run on sentences and a question mark left out but with a poem this strong, that hardly seems to matter.
    And it DID win a trophy. Without God, we really aren’t much, are we?
    We are so blessed that His forgiveness is so easily obtained. Good work.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    December 26, 2008

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    I have lived without you Lord and now I am
    living without myself....the lines caught me ..and made me to feel the pain you have shared here with all your honesaty...well done..


    • WhisperingSpirit
      December 27, 2008
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      Hello thank you so much for the honorable mention.
      Mostly fortaking the time to read my words.


  • BonnieQ silver member
    December 21, 2008

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    Faceless and Nameless

    This brings out such a good point of what happens when we live without our Father and His Christ: we become nameless and faceless, a painful place to be, one that can become quite deadly. Well done! I really like this approach to the contest prompt of 'losing face.'

    Best wishes!


    • WhisperingSpirit
      December 27, 2008
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      Thank you Bonnie for taking your time to read my words.
      Yes with out our Lord there is nothing.


  • Puppydog gold member
    December 21, 2008

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    TOUCHING!!!!!

    One can easily lose themselves in todays world We need to keep faith and hope alive within our hearts so we can keep on facing this cruel world.'s


    • WhisperingSpirit
      December 27, 2008
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      Hi Kevin thank you sovery much for your comment on my words.
      Hope all is well.
      Always nice to hear from you

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