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' A many splendored thing '

The day I married love
my pulse rained kisses all over your face
and gave me memories untold…

 and that was when...



The ablution of pain
drained, a result of  kisses,

that rain falling like snowflakes

dissolving into the essence
of being.. dispersed upon
A foundation in relation
to the next phase..

in stages like cocoons
that relinqishes it's
protective barrier
so that the butter-
flys away into
the dawn of a new day
uncertain of life's
peeks ,and valleys
yet emboldened by
the strength of a love
powerful enough to
cause earth's quake
when a mortal body shakes
and calm resolve surrenders
unto the will of heart
and its mightiest power
trumps them all once again
and proclaims yet another
victorious feat delivered
special,  signed by sender..
LOVE

Author notes

Somehow, while swirling my fingers in my thought puddle
this came..and it showed the word con, and test(l.o.l. not really! ) anyways.

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  • hate2lovelove2hate
    November 24
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    Definitely requires more than one read to get the full force behind your beautiful words. You truly are an amazingly talented poet. Props to you


    • Swangrnv gold member
      November 24
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      well now..

      if i were cake, i'd be falling apart right now..l.o.l.
      you're killing me so nicely! l.o.l. thanks again my dfriend, glad you liked..


  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 26

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    My word....I have to come back and read again to let this one sink deep...It is stunning!
    Will be back tonight, sigh....to absorb it...Amazing!


    • Swangrnv gold member
      October 27
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      aaww.. sweetie!

      thank you! you're very much making me smile widely with all this wonderful commenting! truly appreciate your presence here on my pages..


  • ReachingForStars
    September 15
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    Wow, this is amazingly deep. I love your rhymes and beat! It reads like a song!
    Great write man. =]
    -K


  • georgie
    August 7
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    omgs...what a beautiful piece... this is just incredible. im not often lost for words but..............
    xxx

  • Beautiful just so much beauty in your words the emotions spent here is just amazing

    • Swangrnv gold member
      July 7
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      thank you

      i appreciate your kind words so much, and i promise to return the favor..


  • DeeDee
    June 19

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    Love the beauty of this poem, the flow is that of a soft melody, a gentle rain and a summer breeze. This is truly LOVE & totally AWESOME....DeeDee


    • Swangrnv gold member
      June 19
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      thank you..

      i truly appreciate your sweet comment and am happy you liked this write my friend..


  • Raspy
    May 17

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    A Beautiful Write

    Wow, This blew me away, your words,the rhythm and lol,yup di passions flowing on moonlit rippling waves. I thouroughly enjoyed this. You write very well !


    • Swangrnv gold member
      May 17
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      aaww..

      thank you so much! i'm very pleased you liked this write my friend and appreciate your very sweet comment..

  • i love it i wish i my love life was a fairytale
    lol!!!!

    • Swangrnv gold member
      May 28
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      thank you

      i'm happy you love it! and appreciate the kind words my friend..


  • Hetha gold member
    February 23

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    Wow!

    Such rich emotion and feeling laced throughout the entire work..what's not to love? Beautiful!


    • Swangrnv gold member
      May 28
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      how did i..

      miss this!? i'm so sorry my sweet friend! thanks so much for you sweet commwent, and support always!


  • Titus gold member
    February 21
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    This I have to say is one of your best, and is an envy away from a sulk, on my part. Lovely words.

  • Bob Fox
    February 15
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    Nice poet

    a better definition of love would be hard to find. Let love reign supreme.

    • Swangrnv gold member
      February 15
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      thanks!

      what a grat comment! i appreciate it sir, glad yo enjoyed it..

  • You've really captured here the power of love and its many-faceted blessings! What beautiful imagery you've used to portray its wonder!


    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 27

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      thanks!

      So wonderful to see you enjoyed this piece my friend, and I truly appreciate your time reading and commenting.

  • I try very hard not to take lines to put in my comments simply because I believe the poet wants true comments not their own words. But, if I DID use lines, I couldnt with this one because so many are gracious in their beauty that they should be read so to see the beauty in love, not to simply jot back down.Bravo!

  • omg! i so love this kh you really did a very great job with this hon it was a pleasure readig this good luck to you in the contest

    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 13
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      thank you

      you know u make me blush my friend.. Appreciate your support..


  • LadyLavender gold member
    January 11
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    Beautiful, layered with love's many splendid things!

    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 11
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      aaww..

      thank you my friend, so happy you saw such beauty..i'm honored by your words.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    January 6

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    Very nice work here

    It gave the very image of love swirling within the mind a dizzy feeling yet wonderous in its own way

    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 6
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      thank you

      i truly appreciate your support my friend..


  • Mallig gold member
    January 3
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    Just wonderful. You write love so well!


    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 3
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      thank you

      aaww..you say such sweet things my friend, sure missed you, and your visits to my page!!


  • karma-n-peace
    January 3

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    Your sweet romanticism ( not a word.. I know) always touches me.
    This write is beautiful to say the least.
    Worthy of a Gold


    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 3
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      thank you

      my friend you been following my work for awhile now, so i'm certain you know how much i love a visit from you! truly appreciate your support lady.


  • edens-envy
    December 31, 2008

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    'My pulse rained kisses all over your face'

    I love this line.
    You have a powerful way with words here, they reach straight for the heartstrings in an iron-like vise grip that holds you captive until won over completely. Utterly beautiful.


    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 1
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      aaaww..

      thank you so very much for the wonderful comment, i can't take credit for that line though(i loved it also!) it was part of the prompt for the contest..but the rest is all me!


  • Iridessa MoonFlower
    December 29, 2008

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    WOW! I love this. My favorite line is "flys away into
    the dawn of a new day" It sticks out to me. Sometime I wish I could fly away, & start over but I know I can't. Good luck in the contest! ~~Iridessa~~


    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 29, 2008
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      thank you

      so happy you liked this, yeah i have those thoughts sometimes myself, so you're not alone lady! ..appreciate your support always my friend..


  • Patpowers silver member
    December 28, 2008
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    Great job on this! Just a beautiful write! THANKS AGAIN!!


    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 28, 2008
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      thank you

      Appreciate your comments my friend thank so much i'm glad you found this piece enjoyable..


  • hawkeslake gold member
    December 24, 2008

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    How on earth did I miss this one???? Absolutely fabulously sensuously beautiful! You have so many wonderful comments already, I'm not sure I can even come close -- but I think the love just dances out of this. I hope this means, Lucky You!


    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 24, 2008
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      aaww..

      why my lovely friend you did just fine, so much so that i'm blushing! thanks so much for the read and the great comment!


  • albymyheart gold member
    December 22, 2008

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    Just lovely. You've done a wonderful job expressing love in this poem...alby


    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 22, 2008
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      thank you

      I pleased you enjoyed this write my most loyal and sweet friend! I truly appreciate you, and your outstanding talent!


  • Amera gold member
    December 22, 2008

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    aww... your love poems make me swoon. The passion that you pen draws me so close to you.

    Love,
    Amera♥


    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 22, 2008
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      aaww..

      you're so sugary sweet!! i think i just got a toothache from this comment!!
      but it's ok, i'll live with the pain l.o.l. thank you mrs. wonderful!

  • Melrose
    December 22, 2008

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    Swan, sounds like more than just your fingers were swirling in those thought puddles of yours. Really beautiful piece; you have a knack for pulling at one's heart strings with your poetic prose. Good luck in the contest!


    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 22, 2008
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      thank you

      wow what a sweet thing to say! i truly appreciate you my friend, now of course i'm wondering how much i owe you for this extremely wonderful comment!! l.o.l. j.k. thanks again my friend!


  • Titus gold member
    December 21, 2008

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    Your verbage is courageously admired and swooned upon, and you have united a passion for writing like this now, as the contemporay art form that I am lacking, is out of date and therefore antiquated verse, I think, for me has come to an end, I have to redirect my learning curve in this direction for, not only having seen the comments, but that, those who do appreciate my compositions are as followers, are very weak debits, compared with yours. The sustaining of nature is notorious, a beautiful way you manage to twirl the dance-like words, any natural dancer could convey. My appreciation of your work, comes at a time, when somehow, it has improved 100 fold, in the direction of nature than the natural lust which sees it as nothing more, as that you have veered from. My sadness now is affected somewhat by the beauty of this, and I expect another 20 or so comments coming your way, for the sake of my inadequacy to attract nothing more than those who are happy, seeing a writer, (myself), keeping in the boring chromotone, of grey. Mammoth write my freind, and this is probably your best work do date. Very well done, it is worthy of publication. Now, I leave.
    Shakespeare needs to come into the 20th century. Best wishes for christmas. Sir William.


    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 22, 2008
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      WOW..

      I'M COMPLETELY, UTTERLY FLATTERED MY FRIEND..I don't know what to say except, thank you!


  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    December 21, 2008

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    a result of kisses,
    that rain falling like snowflakes
    dissolving into the essence
    of being.. dispersed upon

    oooh loved this


    Anna Lee


  • Desire gold member
    December 21, 2008

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    Excellent!!

    Oh My Word this is a Beauty my Friend and Love the emotions also the feeling of words weaved
    Bravo on taking this prompt and letting the fingers swirl~ also reference to notes in the AC-
    Amazing what a puddle of thoughts can do
    Woot!
    Wowzers! Adore the rhyme too
    Bravo~
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
    Best wishes in the contest too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 21, 2008
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      l.o.l.

      I know! I keep finding that out! l.o.l. thanks so much my friend for such an excellent comment!


  • Angelflower
    December 21, 2008

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    This was really lovely hun. something that was soft and yet beautiful.. Talented poet you You always tend to surprise me Best of luck hun.

    Angel

    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 21, 2008
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      thank u

      happy u liked this, and i appreciate the lovely compliments!


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    December 21, 2008

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    Very descriptive and the imagery runs wild... I love the last portioned in particular, signed by sender... LOVE. [You have a talent, that shows greatly...]

    becca :;


    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 21, 2008
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      wow

      why becca what big fonts u have! i truly appreciate your kind words and i'm happy liked this piece my friend!


  • hotchocolate gold member
    December 21, 2008

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    Excellent!

    I love what you did here and I enjoyed this read from you! Good luck in the contest hon

    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 21, 2008
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      thanks

      glad you liked this write my friend..


  • Draig aine gold member
    December 21, 2008
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    stunning

    what a seductive write my friend

    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 21, 2008
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      thank you

      truly appreciate your support my friend, and i'm happy you liked this piece..


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    December 21, 2008

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    bond of love
    it transform the world
    lifts the soul.

    Yet emboldened by
    the strength of love.

    wow amazing
    word choices big brother
    and fantastic rhythm
    excellent
    God bless you...


    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 21, 2008
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      hi sweetie!

      thanks so much, again for always being there for me and showing your undying support..it means more than you know!


  • Mariana gold member
    December 21, 2008

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    WOW!

    This is so beautiful. The flow of it is breathtakingly poignant. Bravo!

    Mariana

    Can I submerge myself in your thought puddle


    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 21, 2008
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      aaww..

      my sweetheart! thank you so much..i am ashamed of myself that i let even one of ur wonderful comment go by w/out responding..i will be better ok? thanks so much for your support!


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    December 21, 2008
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    your so romeo beyond belief i so can't believe i am reading such love beneath your fingertips it is marvelous you really have shocked me a whole lot i never would have thought you were delicate enough to even be able to write such love of course i saw your heart a few times but i read the beats of it this time and its marvelous your so sweet


    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 21, 2008
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      l.o.l.

      yeah, waxing the poetic for my homegirl's approval! glad you liked it my friend!


  • geckogirl silver member
    December 21, 2008

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    this my friend is breathtaking once again...The day I married love my pulse rained kisses all over your face and gave me memories untold…





    • Swangrnv gold member
      December 21, 2008
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      thanks!

      you have in a short time become one of my biggest supporters and i thank you profusely my friend, and that means alot to me..P

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