We walked outside one dark winter's morning,
The frost still on the leaves and the roses.
The temperature was cold, the wind, even colder,
Yet we were there, in the dawn of the morning.
As we stood there, the sun's rising slow,
We could see the fog from our breath fusing as one.
We'd watch as it mixed, and then vanished completely.
We held each other close; together in the snow.
We turn to each other, the icy wind sifting through your hair.
The dew had fallen in it, and the wind made it freeze.
I didn't care, though. You were immaculate, no matter what.
You were my ice princess. Our love we'd always share.
I gazed into your crystal eyes; those shimmering, blue sapphire jewels.
They peirced me, transfixed in place. I could only stare hopelessly.
Hopelessly, but I didn't care. So long as it was with you...
Not one thing could fix my heart more. Not any kind of human tools.
I glanced at your lips, as they were frosted violet.
You looked so wonderful to me. I grasped you closer, and you me.
We were one in another. One. One...
We were one person.
Fate.
I gazed at the sky, and the aurora shot across the atmosphere
Like a shimmering drape across a bed of mountains.
It reminded me of the way your dress looked when we danced
The evening before, by the fire. You danced softly, and my eye did tear.
The light of dawn grew lighter still.
It revealed your cheeks to be flushed ruby red.
Red as the frozen roses beside.
We held each other tighter still.
The wind picked up, and the clouds rolled in.
The cold was near unbearable. I felt you shiver,
And you forced your rosey cheek upon mine.
The instant warmth of soul I felt. It couldn't be a sin.
Our love was unbreached. unbreached.
Fate.
I never wanted to pull my cheek away from yours.
The deep feeling of nostalgia...
I yearned to see your pleasant face again;
To see those perfect features that my heart so adores.
We stood there, planted. Like a pair of trees.
No. One tree. One heart. One mind. One spirit. One love.
Our love; one irreversible by time or tribulation.
One that couldn't be shaken by inumerable pleas.
We wanted to move, but we couldn't. We wouldn't.
We were cold, but our souls were aflame.
Together, we would be the same.
We stood out in the frigid gales. We wouldn't move. We wouldn't.
Our love was frozen in place. Frozen. Frigid. Froze.
A love meant to be. A love that was. A love that is.
A love that ever will be. A love that continues to be.
A love youthful, forever. Our love. Was it fate?
A love frozen in time; This is our love.
Fate.
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Amazing love! How can it be? Are you in love with this poem?
Comments
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wow...
it has left me speechless.. bravo =]
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Overall pretty good. Touching although a tad cliché but thats alright. If you don't mind me pointing a few things out I shall. When you rhyme - do not rhyme one word with itself. Consider rephrasing those lines.
The wind picked up, and the clouds rolled in.
The cold was near unbearable. I felt you shiver,
And you forced your rosey cheek upon mine.
The instant warmth of soul I felt. It couldn't be a sin.
Our love was unbreached. unbreached.
Why is this stanza 5 lines? it threw me off a bit. Just separate the last line. And why the repetition of unbreached? (which according to my computer isn't a word
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and one more question? how much snow is there if there are still roses??? - I'm a canadian so snow means like a good foot and a half 
good job
keep up the writing
♥♥♥Kat
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"As we stood there, the sun's rising slow,
We could see the fog from our breath fusing as one.
We'd watch as it mixed, and then vanished completely.
We held each other close; together in the snow."
"The wind picked up, and the clouds rolled in.
The cold was near unbearable. I felt you shiver,
And you forced your rosey cheek upon mine.
The instant warmth of soul I felt. It couldn't be a sin.
Our love was unbreached. unbreached."
"We stood there, planted. Like a pair of trees.
No. One tree. One heart. One mind. One spirit. One love."
There was so many beautiful, breath taking lines in this piece...it actually made me a little dizzy. I was taken a back my the language of this piece. It wasn't just that "I love you and you love me", it was mature yet youthful...not to many people on this site around my age group can write romance poetry with conviction and beauty.
This was romantic and serene. There was also this slight sensual undertone in this piece as well.
It really was well writen, this just might be a favorite of mine. Must check out your other writes.
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