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What Happened

Given to the rages of anger
Struck by a tiny note
Lightning in the air
Heartbreak in the wake
A moments glare
Bring me back
Back to the days of joy
Lead me to that memory
Of giggles in the dark
Dragged through the mire
Beat upon my brow
Lost in the present
Slowly dying to come home
A face that shows the wear
A mind that bares the strain
Anger is the weapon
Misery is it's foe
Bring me back to happy
Or lay me down to rest

 

 

 

 

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  • raggyann
    October 26

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    wow this was realy good
    you did a good take on the pronpt
    i like this poem just like you wote it no part bettr than another


  • soulfultia gold member
    April 8

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    Words of loss that hang heavy on the heart, but on that note...I love "giggles in the dark", that made me smile dark yet lovely penning, ~Tia


    • Quiet places
      April 10
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      Thank you Tia for the comment on my poem. Happy to hear you enjoyed it. Don


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    March 24

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    excellent~

    Powerful and very thought provoking words you have penned here sweetie
    Excellent as always
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


    • Quiet places
      April 10
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      Thank you Susan for the comment on my poem. Happy to hear you enjoyed it. Don


  • Gwenevere
    February 15

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    Each time we speak in anger we lose something, if only our dignity.The weapon turns itself on us as the anger dies and we feel sadly lost.You describe the aftermath of anger well my friend, Ros


    • Quiet places
      February 25
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      Thank you Ros for the wonderful comment and compliments on my poem. Happy to hear you enjoyed it. Don


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 7

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    Yes.. I have felt this way before for sure! One way or the other.. just... resolution somehow!!


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    December 26, 2008

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    Nicely weaved the dillema and its layers ..wonderful expressions..and thoughtful concept is seen in the words..well done my friend...


  • Desire gold member
    December 22, 2008

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    Aaaaaaaaaaaaw~

    Oh My while reading I kept seeing days of old and how the Knight defended his honor
    Excellent piece here my Friend and Love the images that relate to prompt~
    Bravo!!
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
    Best wishes in the contest too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


    • Quiet places
      December 23, 2008
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      Thank you Desire for the compliments on my poem. Love your vivid imagination. Happy you enjoyed it. Don


  • BonnieQ silver member
    December 21, 2008

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    Interesting Approach to "Losing Face"

    This is very well-written and flows quite nicely. Emotionally, it responds to the deception created by manipulators, great on one hand and abusive on the other: makes one think of that old movie, "The Three Faces of Eve," as though we deal with a different person in the same body every day.

    Best wishes!


    • Quiet places
      December 22, 2008
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      Love your comment BonnieQ. Thank you for the compliments on my poem. Happy to hear you enjoyed it. Don


  • Denerica
    December 21, 2008
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    Wow sure feel it... the words are powerful.


    • Quiet places
      December 22, 2008
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      Thank you for the compliments on my poem Denerica. Glad you liked it. Don


  • Gold-feathers
    December 21, 2008

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    That was nice and I really felt his one. Dunno what to say but this was short and simple and still filled with pain I love the lines:
    "Anger is the weapon
    Misery is it's foe
    Bring me back to happy
    Or lay me down to rest"
    specially last two lines. over-all nice poem and good luck in the contest. Keep on penning lol!


    • Quiet places
      December 22, 2008
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      Thank you SilverQuill for the compliments on my poem. Happy to hear you enjoyed it. Thanks again. Don

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