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Whos there anymore.

Beacuse you were allways there for me~

Your a part of me.

I miss you so.

I miss your soul.

You set me free.

Beacue you protect me.

You know, I was yours when you were alone.

I carry things that remind me of you.

You were as kind as you coulod be, considering all the things i've done to you and me.


And even thow your gone I think of you.

I never knew what it was to be alone.

Now I go home and its not the same for me.

Soo------- cold I miss you even more.

I pray to God youll forgive me for being.

I canot be your friend.

Will you forget the past.

Will we ever be again .

Beacues I have found all that shimmers in this world is sure to fade away.

She says that love is for fools that fall behind.

But here and now will we ever be again?

Im sure to fade away, again.

Im to far away for you to hold.

But please just reach for me one more time~!

AM I to contajuse?

Am I to black and cold.

Please tell me what you think

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  • xDemonicxAngelx
    December 22, 2008

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    I really liked this but the colour of your font made it so hard to read, I had to highlight it to read it. You did a good job with this, and I hope to read more from you soon.

    Take care


  • Nephlim
    December 20, 2008
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    One thing: You might consider changing the font? I had to highlight it to read it .

    I really loved the emotion in this, how well you expressed yourself and your pain. But never really placed any blame on her. You might want to read through it and fix some spelling errors though, to make the poem structure itself stronger =].