Thy love doth wilt like pressed roses
Strewn beneath yellowing pages of parchment
And I, intent on passionate discourse,
Did surely take to thee by candlelight and flame,
Igniting alabaster skin with steadfast love.
O for thou love to burn as a wick!
Ambrosial orbs dance upon the wind
And, still, reaching upward for God,
Thou blush in ripened colours of crimson.
Love turn’d round in green-eyed haste
To shake the very boughs of perdition,
And the tempest’s fruit did fall down;
Lo, as Adam did unto Eve, I gazed upon thee
And was not ashamed of what I saw.
A contest entry
- Olde Fashioned Love by Have left the stage.
1400 points, ended December 30, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wonderful job. I rarely like off takes on Shakespeare, but I enjoyed it. It flowed really well, and the imagery is very...realistic *LoLz*
♥ Kathraina
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Perchance, or Penchant, doesn't matter, both would have worked. There is much a godly aspect in this piece, and lovely at that. To gaze upion thee, is adoringly by far as it is near, and therefore chooses all, 'love' scenarios. ,
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three thumbs up!
From pseudohaiku to Edmund Spenser! You are very adaptable, Anessen!
I have some quiet baroque music in the background here and this fits in cery nicely!
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Beautifully Sensual & Romantic!!!
I just love the entire piece - amazing!! 
This is a winner!! Wishing you all the best!! Peace always, Cyn
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Gorgeous!
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I do think that you might be a winner with this one..A...your old English words and vocabulary, the flow is great....and the romance...superb!
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Oh my...beautiful, beautiful !!!!
Maybe we should bring back some "Olde Fashioned Love"
Your wording is superb, eloquent, with great imagery too.
"Ambrosial orbs dance upon the wind"
"Thou blush in ripened colours of crimson"
Excellent
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I have just got one word for this piece..Beautiful! An absolutely superb piece filled with great imagery! I do not think I'd ever be able to write for this contest. Haha. Old English? Na-uh! But you have done a spectacular job. Amazing flow, and such beautiful words! Bravo!
"Thou blush in ripened colours of crimson.
Love turn’d round in green-eyed haste
To shake the very boughs of perdition, "
^^ I really, really loved those lines! Superb! Well done and all the best to you in the contest, not that you need it because this piece is a beauty! Gold!
Much love,
Ylova
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