My sadness makes me dumb and heavy.
My thoughts rush in rough waves,
heaves of wordlessly earnest despair.
My sadness makes my eyes wide, and vulnerable
Like madness, crazed and blind.
Pungent desperation rises like bile;
My heart slips and plunges,
gagging me with its desolation
As it pries to crawl between my lips,
collapsing heavily in my stomach.
Can I cry hoarse enough for you to hear?
My sentences are silent moans, secret pleas
I beg you to listen, beg my throat to explode.
Loud and passionate, for once in my mute life,
drive my incoherency into a screaming fervor.
My sad, dumb thoughts won’t form words
to explain my milky smile
or my frothing eyes,
Caving inside out, top to bottom
I can’t begin to disguise
the dumb loneliness in my throat.
My sadness makes me dumb and heavy,
I miss you.
Author notes
Option 2: Tears.
A contest entry
- I can't believe I'm doing this again Part Deux by NoUseForAName.
700 points, ended December 31, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me your break-up poems by trekkergirl.
400 points, ended January 5, 80 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I like the last line... I miss you. In break-up poems that is felt most I think. But a lot of people just don't seem to put it into words. You did. Good job. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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This is a very interesting take on the prompt and your word chose is interesting as well. The emotions are strong as well.
The only thing wrong with this entry is that you have entered it in a second contest and I do not allow that, so please remove it from either two of the contests or I won't judge it in my contest.
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sorry about that!
I removed myself from the other one. -
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Thank you
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