Oh God
you shaped the gardens
along the florae
your, each invention is original
and sole except
the unclad comeliness of the women
that is an element you conceived,
can simply substitute the gardens
Oh God...
In a list
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt: Erotic/Sensual by Asylaarix.
400 points, ended January 14, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
hGod...
Comments
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This is simple in its bareness. *Note* -- 'women' is out of tense, should read -"of the woman" or "of women"
Thought provoking piece.
~Starr~ -
Awesome job. Keep up the great work and keep writing great pieces like this one!!! You have enough talent for probably all of us here at Allpoetry! Truly a great write. Such an astoudning and amazing job. If you feel like it, check out my poems and feel free to comment them! Be honest, please! Thanks so much for sharing this piece with all of us here at Allpoetry!
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Sensual image, sensual language and the matter-of-fact way you state that an unclad woman "can simply substitute the gardens" breathes a taste of real life movement to the words. I like this one very much. Peace and best wishes in the contest. Rhonda
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