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Pain

The pain
that wells up inside.
Scorching me
burning my soul.
You say,
"How can I trust you?
When you don't trust yourself."
Frustration
broken,
defective.
Made to be hated.
Made for no one.

Scorching tears,
leaving a trail.
As you yell,
I try to tell
tell you
" I want it to be true.
Won't just let me
Help me, make it true."
But it won't
won't come at all.
So instead,
I stand there
fist balled,
while the tears fall.
And the night
grows darker
my armor thicker
blocking the last,
the last of the light
out.
Silence
darkness.

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  • ToxicSuicide
    January 10
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    This is really great! Thanks for entering Ky! Good luck.
    ~ToxicSuicide.


  • still.she.waits
    January 7
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    as per the rules, please put your name in your authors notes please.


  • SugarInducedSeizure
    December 30, 2008
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    I like it. It's bitter.


  • XXWolfOfInsanityxX
    December 28, 2008
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    Wow this is amazing, I like this , yet it so sad. Confusion tricks the mind. We all go through it but others don't take it so well such as myself. this was a lovely write and very enjoyable read. My favorite lines were

    my armor thicker
    blocking the last,
    the last of the light
    out.
    Silence
    darkness.


    Thats very creative and brilliant :]


  • CinderellaSyndrome
    December 20, 2008
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    Niice.


  • Enigma Kyler
    December 20, 2008
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    There is a meaning.
    The meaning is, if I care enough to feel that.
    Then...
    Don't you think I really do care?


    • xXCadyBabbiXx
      December 20, 2008
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      I hope you do.
      I pray you do.
      Think you do? I'm trying.
      Try to keep reminding me.
      Ill focus my whole being on trusting that.
      Trusting you.


  • xXCadyBabbiXx
    December 20, 2008
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    ugh.
    I keep coming back and reading this freakin thing over and over.
    Trying to figure out single hidden meaning in it.
    Is there even any?
    Or am I missing it?
    I hope you didnt actually feel like this...
    Its a horrible thing.


  • xXCadyBabbiXx
    December 20, 2008

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    Kyler.
    This made me hurt.
    Made me hurt bad.
    I think Im causing more damage than helping.
    :l
    I thinking..I should be talking to you, because Im only hurting you more.

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