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tidbits

 I

 

"eavesdrop beyond favorable prospects
and browse her subtle half-thoughts"

said, soft beacon of comely contact 

 

i swear it was reflected echo
which encouraged heart to take notice

 

II

 

arable corruption

 

allow me to bend pink ribbons 

 

and spread internal gossip

 

with new erotica

 

and beautiful kink

 

insatiable to appetite

 

III

 

are freeholders fooled
by chemical aspects
or does cupid exist
as soul suspects? 
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • isabellacohen
    December 25, 2008

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    interesting read

    interesting to read,
    i think your title really suits your poem,
    i liked the first verse ,
    thanks for entering
    best wishes,
    Isabella


  • Darkwell
    December 21, 2008

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    kewl any one of the stanzas can totally stand by itself

    i swear it was reflected echo
    which encouraged heart to take notice

    is that like seeing yourself in somebody else which starts an attraction? its beautiful but im not sure my brain is big enough yet to absorb all your brainway

    this is really deep and lovely


  • softest-whispers
    December 20, 2008

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    I think my favorite part is the second one, it seems vaguely reminiscent or something lol

    ~Luce


  • geckogirl silver member
    December 20, 2008
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    this is really beautiful, good luck


  • PerfectImperfection
    December 20, 2008

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    There is indeed a deep beauty about this... A sort of conscience laden sigh - but of hopeful dreaming. I like the form and weave to this - powerful. Lovely write!

    (he exists, just a bored archer that sometimes finds the bullseye - when people aren't feeding him alcohol! )


  • Cannonsfire
    December 20, 2008

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    This is just beautiful, such softness here from you, hmmm sounds like someone is finding his heart again C

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