star-crusted spirals wash woe of vital sea
left stranded shimmering along
pieced into ribbons of incandescence
pierced pleas drench anticipation's plunder
personal pronouns are nonexistent
paved over by pearl particles
and the leftovers of star-dust
remnants of requiem sweep serenity's shore
a tragic hum salvaged sweet
to sprinkle across jaded horizon
imperfected embers surface to breathe
stranded strands from a necklace
sing both true lore and exaggeration
in tribal turns of impious destiny
symbolism shines along crept vines
unraveling premise fails to prove
the gravity of duties proclaimed
as rusted roots filter augmentation
astral symphony blooms in haste
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Nicely penned piece. The use of vocabulary made for a nice transcient adjoined thought by two great poets. I enjoyed this piece immensely. I am glad to have stumbled upon it.
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A fantastic collaboration! I can't tell what is who's. Attention grabbing alliteration, stunning imagery and the occasional internal rhyme all ombine to make this an outstanding read. Congrats!
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pierced pleas drench anticipation's plunder
personal pronouns are nonexistent
paved over by pearl particles
and the leftovers of star-dust
remnants of requiem sweep serenity's shore
uhyeaaaaaaah, somethng like this.
pierced please drench anticipation's surrender. . .
damn. that was worth repeating surely another time. . .you two this is gorgeous.
Love,
jin
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Thanks so much for the great comment!!!
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Oh I see it now
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Thankies for the .
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Well, technically a dash.
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"Astral symphone blooms in haste" -- like your background, the collaboration sparkles with unusual words and alliteration... and still, an inkling of profoundity in each line... very interesting to read.
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Excellent
So very creative and well expressed as always. Such a great collab.
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Great collab Bro, enjoyed every word and metaphor in this C
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gosh you two get off on being wordy eh
beautiful flow
Tasha
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Well you always tell me something like that so - yeah, with another wordy person I have lots of indescribable creative adventures!
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uh huh... heheh
Thanks
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Nice BG - makes it all twinkly lmao!
Thank you for writing with me!
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It was a pleasure.
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