close my eyes, let it all pass by,
turning invisible slowly fading to nothing,
does anyone see me? does anyone care?
dont say it didnt matter we both know the truth
broken hearts are a part of this youth.
the three little words can't be taken back
so please dont even try
let me hold on to them, let me keep the lie
trying to put the pieces back together
but a like broken vase cant hold water,
a broken soul cant keep secrets.
so out they pour for the world to see
but i wonder, will they even like the real me?
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Wow, ending to this piece is perfect. I love it, beautiful thoughts.
Nela
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this is beautiful!
especially---
close my eyes, let it all pass by,
turning invisible slowly fading to nothing
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Delightful
A very moving piece I must say ... I like the closing lines -
' but like a broken vase cant hold water,
a broken soul cant keep secrets.
so out they pour for the world to see
but i wonder, will they even like the real me? '
I think as a society each and every one of us suffer from insecurities of one kind or another. I certainly do. Some of us hide some of these traits with an over-confidence, some of us appear eternally 'happy' on the surface. The trick is trying to maintain a functional acceptable level of emotion, being true within ourselves and not having to try too hard in life and living-up to certain stereotypes. As we get older and wiser (hopefully)we tend to grow into ourselves and discover how to appreciate our own uniqueness. We have to learn to like ourselves before we insist that people in our lives like us.
You can't make people like you though that's for sure so we go with what we've been given.
Anyway
Seasons greetings and all the best for the the year !!
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thank you so much
i believe your right, i dont think i know anyone who is totally ok with themselves. im working on it because i also agree that we cant really have people like us until we like ourselves. thank you so much for your nice comment
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This was an amazing poem. I could feel the emotions pouring our just like the broken vase. This was deep, and I enjoyed it very much. I only have one little suggestion for this line,
"but a like broken vase cant hold water,"
Perhaps you meant but like a broken vase. That is all; I can also say that I relate to this poem a lot right now, I wonder all the time if anyone will like the real me. Hopefully your days will brighten though, and your mood uplifted; because I would love to also read a poem of something happier by you, I'm sure it would be wonderful. I would also just like to mention that I'm really happy you made a contest, I was looking for one and yours is perfect lol.
Crazy-Love♥
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lol first let me say thanks for entering my contest
haha but also thank you for commenting, really it means a lot to me. im hopeing that things will get better and i wont be so afraid to show who i really am. and thanks for pointing out my little mistake
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Nice. Thank you for sharing this poem. I really enjoyed reading it.
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