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etched echoes of every day

 

 

 

 

 

She imagined him sighing

beneath folded layers

of emotion,

as naivety delivered dates

upon the ceiling of his fears

 

and agreeance adhered

to misfortune...not future.

 

She glared grace in the face,

as foresight dared to appreciate

more than it could convey

 

and the pages of their path

showed belief another side...

 

yet they hastened to admit

that there was a certain hiatus,

as distance danced

ten thousand times too tall

 

and destiny soon swore at them

as they reversed back

whence they came.

 

Their breath buried itself

beneath nameless nouns

and twelve-step guides

provided temporary freedoms;

yet those selves on life's shelves

glared only through past...

 

through the pain of slain souls

who uttered love's dying plans.

 

Their bite marks denied faith

in dangerous eyes,

as feeling drew floods

along unfortunate veins

 

and undernourished hearts

wore wariness

like barbed wire,

as desire sought togetherness

in silence's starved smiles.

 

She asked for unimportance,

yet pranced with possibilities

as realities rendered

mere misunderstandings...

 

and as hand wore hope's suit

in pursuit of spirit's whole,

voice vehemently ventured

along tinctures untouched.

 

She came here simply

to tread upon truth,

to write rights

and prevent petty wrongs--

 

to share the care

she genuinely feels

for his warmth of welcome

and for his acceptance

of her...

 

without judgement

 

and to know bliss

within the kisses

of re-written tales.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

"The kindest love is still bleeding from the last shot."

L a u r a L a m a r c a

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  • There were parts of this that reminded me of what went on between me and my mother -- the whole trust thing. Though I do think the way you wrote this makes it open to any kind of relationship, romantic, friendship, or family. This is beautiful.


  • crystaldust gold member
    January 17

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    Yet again you reveal layer upon layer of emotion and events along life's past. This is brilliant in evocation, nuances and just about every kind of experience in sadness, being lost....and so on.
    It certainly deserved the silver ... though I suspect it should have been the gold.


  • raw love
    January 4

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    Thanks for entering!
    well your words dance about with grace, even in some ambiguity. obviously though I can't see an apparent connection between the phrase and the poem. It would have been more effective to relate the phrase to even one element in your poem than to say you don't know why you chose the prompt. At any rate it was an enjoyable read.


    • Laura Lamarca gold member
      January 4
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      The poem is connected appropriately to the phrase...yet I wrote it in metaphor and "showed" rather than "told" - I like to be creative and different and using part or whole of a phrase within the body of my writings shows 2 things...firstly, unoriginality and secondly, laziness on my part. By using a variety of poetic device, this piece is deep and thought-provoking and relates entirely to the chosen prompt.


  • Danna Hobart
    December 30, 2008

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    This is very good, filed with imagination. I will have to read it more than once to let it all sink in Thank you for entering my contest.


  • mum2jay
    December 22, 2008

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    Beautiful

    Ah...I can see u are a big fan of internal rhyme - and u do it so well.
    If this is truly unedited straight from the muse to the pen, then u are indeed a gifted writer...
    Bravo!


  • Nom de Plume
    December 21, 2008

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    Beautiful write... guess one has to learn to trust before anything else huh...


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    December 21, 2008
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    Yes. Pretty good!


  • tear stained pillow
    December 20, 2008

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    Your "putting the pen to the paper" method ended up creating a masterpiece! This is stunningly written! One of my favorites of yours.
    " She glared grace in the face,
    as foresight dared to appreciate
    more than it could convey"
    This stanza captivated my trail of thought

    Your poetry always leaves me inspired! Good luck in the contest much love
    Jess!ca


  • Hetha gold member
    December 20, 2008

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    Unedited?? Darlin...your 'unedited' versions, put my 'edited 50 times over' pieces to shame, so shush.

    ~Love Ya,
    Hettie

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