My love was like a rose in snow
calm and quiet in my heart
touching me from hair to toe
turning my dumb to smart
My Love was like a butterfly
delicate, light in the air
my heart busy as a beehive
my eyes at you, didst stare
My love was like a turtledove
soft cooing sounds did emit
stirring depts of pure love
insanity, now causing me a fit
Oh my love didist far more
canst I hurt only in the joy
heal the heart broken and sore
help me to find a new ploy
My Love, the center of my life
in orbit do I now freely spin
sharing harmony not strife
kiss me but once again
death canst never part us
the beating heart does not stop
causing only a minor fuss
your lost memories to swap
My love is ever with me
a part of my very soul
looking, I ever will see you,
never an empty deep dark hole.
Author notes
Love was, is and eternally ever more
Art by Deviat Art
A contest entry
- Olde Fashioned Love by Titus.
1400 points, ended December 30, 2008, 14 entries
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Wow, what a beautifully
crafted love poem.
This was amazing.
Thanks for entering & best of luck -
This is lovely, "touching me from hair to toe
turning my dumb to smart. This is concise, but for death to hath you never poart, I'd think more appropriate that, you ask, than make a statement. "Could death for all it's gory details, Part?" But other than the deep hole looking more like an abyss, I'd add some prosperity somewhere, than leaving it deep. Nothing a little editing cannot do, it looks promising as it seems here.
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Beautifully penned...
Lovely sentiments...
Write on and on!
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Thank You
It is easy when you do it from the heart and have a Muse that works with you
Happy Holidays
W W
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Ah, the many incarnations of love. Beatifully expressed with such hearfelt sentiment. Well done, poet. Best of luck to you.
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Thank YOU
I let out a little bit at a time. Love released is painful, especially when it is love lost to death. But it also stays with me too, and makes each day a little more special
Thanks again
WW
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Ahh, my friend, this is brilliantly said. Love the ending to this, truly. It's often hard to move on after a loved one passes, but you said it yourself to me- we birth, we grow, and we unfortunately end that cycle too. Always in heart and spirit, take even a small amount of comfort that you will all meet again.
Good luck in the contest.
Storm
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Thank You Storm
I express what is still in my heart - this also rekindles the love still there, and hte memories. Slowly, 1 day at a time, Imove forward, but that is not to take away from what was. It will always be a part of my life and who I am.
I thank you so very much for being such a good friend and sister.
Hugs
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