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Galilleo Remington

Galilleo Remington
looked slightly out of place,
his pose showed little grace,
I seldom saw his face.

Since he had happened home again
from prison down in Spain,
expressionless and plain,
I wondered if he's sane.

Then everything was different
as soon as it was night,
if no clouds were in sight,
he shone with pute delight.

For every single evening's spent
there at the windowsill,
him holding very still,
to songs of whipporwhill.

Then as the time grew lwater
I would leave to go to bed,
I'd wave and nod my head,
and this he always said:


"There's nothing any greater
in this galaxy of ours,
forget Venus and Mars,
I so love shooting stars!"


Author notes

From a picture prompt supplied by Lauren.

Rhyme scheme:

abbb
accc
deee
dfff
ghhh
giii

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  • myrataal silver member
    December 26, 2008

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    Wow. It is as I said ...

    an incredible team, this Allan/Lauren alliance!

    You funny man: may your happiness be no word play but real day dreams.



    Prolonged Season to you and yours.
    Love
    Always Myra


  • daffodilblossom
    December 23, 2008
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    whipporwhill nice word play

  • Pome
    December 21, 2008
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    This is a great rhyme. So enjoyable to ponder the imagery and character. Great Job!


  • rinzurajan
    December 21, 2008

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    strange character dissection...




  • Hetha gold member
    December 21, 2008
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    Quirky. I like it!


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    December 20, 2008

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    This is a cute poem. I enjoyed it. It is an interesting rhyme scheme. I loved the picture.

    Great job.

    Mike


  • hawkeslake gold member
    December 20, 2008
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    Nicely done, with an intriguingly strange character! I really enjoyed reading this. Thanks!


  • DolceVito gold member
    December 20, 2008

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    What a superb write...I found the title humorous...didn't get it until I looked at the prompt.


  • Draig aine gold member
    December 20, 2008
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    GREAT READ


  • 2lullabyhaven
    December 20, 2008

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    Lauren has great taste in prompts, and you have great abilities to make them all come to life

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