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Montser Chase

It's dark and chilly  on Hallowwen night
the graveyard is barren
and 45th and Broadway
New York is prettier at Christmas time


Halloween  was my favorite holiday long ago
but I guess there's nothing wrong it
I'm just not one to believe in the paranormal



(Chorus)
Twlight on Halloween night
I tense up and look behind me
my heartbeat escalates
cuz  a  monster is chasing me
with blood dripping from his mouth



Witches  warewolves
The paranormal surrounds me
I'm not one to believe in ghosts
I'm not afraid of anything
people don't believe me but  I'll prove them wrong
(chroua)

I can feel his breath on my neck
it smells like his last meal
is this real?
is a  warewolf really chasing me?
I can't fathom it
(chorus)
I'm out of breath but I have nowhere to hide
I'm shaking on the inside
(chorus)

Suddenly I  realize
that i've been scared for no reason
just  someone in  halloween costume
out to scare the common folk
not to mention he was drunk too
the rancid smell on the tip of her tounge was beer

(chorus repeat  2x til fade)

Author notes

my prompt was running through a graveyard and being chased by a monster. I haven't written lyrics in awhile so i hope these are good.

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Comments


  • albinoblacksheep720
    December 22, 2008

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    Cool

    I like it. It was cool to read. It's okay if you are a bit rusty with this. Overall, it was cool. Good luck


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    December 20, 2008

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    Cool!!!

    Fun, rhythmic narrative with a building tension & twist in the tail...
    Only thing 'Werewolf' instead of warewolf, but apart from that, great stuff...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!