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so much for forever & ever love--

faster;;faster baby--
we need to pick up this whirlwind of a dying[dead]
romance before it crashes & hits the ground

with a [bang]&[ca-ca-crash]

this organ is swelling & stuttering,
baby, I'm dying because of your lies,
every syllable is a knife, every smile
is a lie--

every bruise you leave around my neck
& over my wrists, is just another show
of your weaknesses; does it make you feel good baby?

oh dear;; sweetie, you should know better to want
your cake & eat your pie. I was your princess,
paraded on the highest of horses until you brought
me
d
o
w
n
to hell with a [bang] & now my body is scorched with
your venom & my heart is pierced from your fangs.

don't cry for me love, I'm better than your tears--

& baby; the only thing you ever promised was that:
I'd be yours forever & ever; but darling,
you never counted on my heart turning black;
soot on all of my fingers, black marks left pressed
against your lips where I've tried to stop your words
escaping & creating havoc all over again[again]

I'm being such a bad, bad girl, full of bitterness
& I can't help but blame you for twisting & forcing
my body into this position[i was just another barbie girl]

bruise me;; break me but I'm done,
baby, I'm washing you out of my hands
& out of my hair.

the only way you'll hear from me, is through
all of our songs that we danced to silently
on the radio[& thats only if you're lucky]
loveheart lyrics can't throw themselves against
my body if I whisper that I don't believe in you
[or.in.love] anymore & never ever again--

I said I'd never walk away,
I said I'd never give up on you honey;
I guess I lied.

Author notes

I've not written dp in foreverrrr, this is weak I know, but I may enter again with something better

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Comments


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 30, 2008

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    I love the start of this piece, it's so strong and real, it reminds me so much of Karl, but that's a good thing as the negative connotations help me dislike him even more.

    I also looove the ending. It's like, I guess I lied... But hell, I learnt from the best. It's the same with me. I told him I'd never stop loving him, guess I'm just working with the master, aren't I?

    Anyways hun, its not crap at all

    Loves x


  • written-in-ink
    December 29, 2008
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    very nice

    think you did a good job

    wish you luck