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Hidden Pain

hidden in the darkness
as the pain devours me
tears flowing and loneliness eating me
the pain wont leave
and nightmares fill my head
of the painful flow from your lips
hidden behind a mask
no one knows
so alone in a room
as the demons have their way with me
clinging to the one thing that means love to me
as tears trickle from my eyes

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  • ckwriter69
    December 22, 2008

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    Very strong write Teresa, you bring out a lot of emotions in this, very sad, I like how you didn't capitilize and puncuate this poem it gives the overall write a foreboding look. Keep writing.


  • bergettigirl
    December 21, 2008

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    Very deep poem. Very deep indeed. Hugs to you...
    SOme of us do care... I do
    Take care. try to smile...


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 20, 2008

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    there is nothing but pain in this and that is what makes it something strong as you read it, keep it flowing .


  • Angels Whispers gold member
    December 20, 2008

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    Heart felt


    Sweetheart ,
    I hear you so clearly, and my heart breaks for you.I know your situation and I wish I could help you, but understand your reasons for staying.

    I feel the pain that radiates from your words and I long to help you.
    Feel my arms wrapping around you calming your tortured soul.

    Keep penning your thoughts and feelings dont keep them bottled up, you have many who care for you and will support you always.

    A sad write , but fully understandable.

    Much love to you and blessings for a wonderful Christmas.
    TRy to keep your chin up I know it's hard, but dont let him win.

    Your friend always
    Me