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Will 'e Won't 'e?

Will 'e Won't 'e was a wag;
Shall 'e Shan't 'e craved a shag.
Said Will 'e Won't 'e to his friend,
"There's something you must comprehend..."

So Will 'e Won't 'e stated facts
on how a hopeful suitor acts:
'Shall you let me win your heart?'
Is doomed to failure from the start.

So is:  'You shall love me evermore.'
...Tell her that ~ you're out the door!
So learn my secret, watch my skill,
just bring those girls to your friend Will...







Author notes

I shall bite my nails to the quick in the anticipation that you will be brutally honest in your critiques! Your will shall be my undoing...

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  • Exit-Stage-Right
    January 17

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    I love CricketJeff's contests and I saw this one go by but couldn't get motivated on it. I'm so happy you won the gold !!!!!


  • Peripatetic gold member
    January 3

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    Oh, that Will'e is a wise man! How well he has learned that a lady's more willing when allowed what she will than when it's presumed that she shall!
    Besides devising a delightfully flowing, rhyming verse, you have also drawn a clear distinction between 'will' and 'shall'. Nicely done!

    Until Jeff's contest I never noticed how anyone uses 'shall' or 'will'. In America some legal statements require the use of 'shall', along the lines of Jeff's advice that it may be seen as a command for the 2nd or 3rd person. Otherwise folks just use 'shall' or 'will' as it sounds right to them. Usually 'shall' seems more sure and less conditional than 'will'. Is there a noticeable distinction in Australian usage?


  • Katie Lazette
    January 3
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    Congratulations on winning the gold for your very well written poem.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    January 3

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    I shall give you the gold
    Before I get old
    You will get the points as well
    You will have been told
    That I shall be bold
    And send the rest to hell


  • Tirrell
    December 25, 2008
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    I do love this as well, there is just something infectous about it. very well done!


  • feetus
    December 20, 2008
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    Fun read! That Will seems quite the scamp.


  • geckogirl silver member
    December 20, 2008
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    Well penned I like it

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