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~~~Roes are Red~~~



Roses are red
Just like a cloud
Whispering the news of a storm
Without saying it loud
Both are quiet
And have a great might

Roses are red
Just like our hearts
And our lonely tears
When love of our life departs
Both are too delicate
Both preys of fate

Roses are red
Just like our feet
When they softly bleed
Enjoying love's special treat
Both have to endure pain
One plucked, other insane

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  • Saima
    December 24, 2008
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    beautiful

    roses are red and beautiful like you beautiful thoughts. your grip on poetic rhyming is excellent


  • Celtic Legend
    December 24, 2008
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    oooh good one! turning the classic into modern. cool!
    Celtic


  • ScreaminMime
    December 21, 2008

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    Roses are red
    well organized complementary.

    Keep up the good work,
    thanks for the contest entry.


  • Yah-rod
    December 20, 2008

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    Imagery! Simple and serene...

    The first stanza makes me imagine two roses swaying together in a light breeze before the storm...

    The second is delicate and sadder...a true word from the heart.
    But the third was my favourite...the idea of love as pain, but with something to offer that's worth it all.

    Insane? I liked that ending.

    Nicely worded muse. My type of poem.